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Common Sense in the society - common app


HowieD9 3 / 5  
Jan 26, 2010   #1
Common app essay:criticism accepted!!!

Common Sense???

If a man is raised knowing to fight for every dispute, as far as he is concerned, that is what is right; it is only common sense to show that your opinion is right, no matter the cost to yourself or someone else. However it is ideals such as this that distinctively show that common sense cannot be entirely trusted. If left swayed completely by our common sense, there is no telling what trouble any individual could get themselves into.

Ethics and morals in society play an important role in one's common sense; what they perceive and what they believe in are the utmost key factors to how the common sense acts. If society tells a man to laugh at other people's misfortune, then due to repetition it becomes second nature, and becomes what would seem like common sense. In another society, however, it could be the complete opposite where a man is to frown at other's misfortune. If the two men were to meet and discuss the situation, they would both think they are correct because that is what their common sense tells them.

So the question is to be asked, "Should common sense be questioned?" I think it should, but from what stand point? The only way to actually solve the dispute mentioned is with proper morals; not those based from an individual's upbringing and neither from those based from society. In my opinion it is hard to say from which bases one should align their common sense from. Different races and societies have different ethics and morals which base the acts of their people. To create ones common sense entirely from one culture is simply one track minded. However, it is too farfetched to say that we must derive our common sense from every culture. An individual is only exposed to so much in one lifetime. It is for reasons like these that our common sense is restricted to how we were grown and what our society feeds us. Therefore the next question I think is "Should we bother to question common sense?"
linmark 2 / 328 7  
Jan 27, 2010   #2
Your prompt was very broad - is this an essay on your concept of common sense? You also write that it is for the comm app. As such, I was hoping to read more about what common sense means to you as a person and how you apply it in life (as it relates to applying to university.) Using my common sense, this was the context in which I read your essay.

As such, before getting further into the essay, please confirm if this is the right essay for the comm app. If this is just for essay-writing, then here are general comments:

- the first section of your opening sentence does not make a connection to the second section

If a man is raised knowing to fight for every dispute, as far as he is concerned, that is what is right; it is only common sense to show that your opinion is right, no matter the cost to yourself

Are you confusing common sense with natural physical reflexes or habits?

what theyone perceives and what they believes in are the utmost key factors to how the common sense works?? acts.

I was lost in the final paragraph. You posited a question, then provided the answer that "proper morals" could "solve the dispute." You did not define what this meant and ended with statements that seem to defeat the purpose of the essay.

p.s. You are missing some punctuation (hypens, commas and and ' possessives.)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 28, 2010   #3
I try to discourage people from arbitrarily writing about "men" or "mankind." That is an oppressive convention from an obsolete paradigm. But it's not your fault; this is a common way of writing. But I do this:

If a person is raised knowing to fight for every dispute, as far as she is concerned, that is what is right; it is only common sense to show that your opinion is right, no matter the cost to yourself or someone else. -- this seem very good so far!

But right here is where you lose me:
However it is ideals such as this that distinctively show...
I want to know what ideal you are talking about. To fight someone when there is a dispute?
I am just confused by "fight for every dispute." I wonder what you mean by this. this must be the ideal you are referring to. You might mean that you "fight for what is good."

This essay needs a few plain statements, a few clear assertions. It is very abstract, maybe too abstract. In my opinion... I think you should add some nuts to this candy bar. Offset the ambiguity and abstraction with some clear assertions (i.e. some bold claims) and some examples.
OP HowieD9 3 / 5  
Jan 29, 2010   #4
thanks for your comment,i'll be sure to look into that


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