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"Community and Equity as a battey and its charger" - Lehigh supplement


aikd80cn 4 / 18  
Dec 27, 2009   #1
This is the lehigh supplement asking to define community and equity and their implications in a 21st century society.

Community and equity resemble a battery and a charger; without the battery the charger has no meaning and without the charger the battery is not durable. In a 21st century community, equity holds the members together to reach their goal; one could argue that equity defines a modern community. A community, a gathering for a common purpose under specified agreements, needs its members to be empowered and motivated with equity as a filter though which they are looked upon the same. However equity relies on subjective perception to whether a member accepts the state of equity in his community. Striving for equity is one of mankind's never ending attempts to perfection, as people's identities obstruct the path to equity. The key to many possibilities in this world is one's identity, a feature praised so heavily by humans that is impossible to leave behind. For example if diversity was to be defined by characteristics not identities, the meaning of equity in that community would be stronger.

any comments are welcome
melkamu - / 2  
Dec 27, 2009   #2
I like the way you approach concepts of community and equity.
You would to better if you give it some life by relating it to your daily activities.
gumdrop41 6 / 30  
Dec 29, 2009   #3
Wow!! this is a really great essay!!
just little things
for the last sentence, I feel that you can take out "for example"

great job, I honestly don't have much to edit
fznfire 1 / 32  
Dec 29, 2009   #4
Community and equity resemble a battery and a charger respectively;

I think you need to add the word 'respectively' there.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 3, 2010   #5
A comma is necessary in this kind of sentence:
...without the battery the charger has no meaning, and without the charger...

This is very interesting! I like this approac better than the approach sme people take, trying to decide whether or not cmmunity and equity are compatible. You argue that they are mutually dependent.

If you want to make this super impressive, google leviathan by Hobbes, and read about it, and understand it, and refer to it in the essay. It'll fit nicely with your theme.

sparknotes.com/philosophy/leviathan/summary.html
(sparknotes is very good for helping to understand literature)


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