4ever2bleed 9 / 28 Dec 27, 2008 #1Can somebody check my response for this scholarship questions and please give me some feedback.ThanksHere's the question and response:Tell how you plan to continue your service to the community while your in college and how you will link that with your academic program.I believe that giving back to the community is essential in life. Helping those who are less fortunate gives me a sense of relief. I know that I will make a difference in someone's life and that gives me hope for a better tomorrow. Every step that we take, either be a pat on the back or a helping hand it can change a person's life, and in turn change the world. I plan to continue my service to my community during my collegiate career. I will do so by joining organizations and clubs that provide service to the community. I also have aspirations to implement a non-profit organization or club that will provide assistant and guidance to at risk youths. Seeing that I want to be a child psychologist I believe that this will perfectly link to my academic program. With the knowledge I will obtain from my courses, I will be able to understand why some people act out, I can then identify the problem and then find a way to help them improve their actions.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129 Dec 28, 2008 #2For short answers like this, you have to make every sentence count! Let's look at them individually:I believe that giving back to the community is essential in life.Helping those who are less fortunate gives me a sense of relief.I know that I will make a difference in someone's life, and that gives me hope for a better tomorrow.Every contribution we make, either giving a pat on the back or a helping hand, can change a person's life, and ultimately change the world.I plan to continue my service to my community during my collegiate career by joining organizations and clubs that provide service to the community.above, name specific clubs and organizations!I also have aspirations to implement a non-profit organization or club that will provide assistant and guidance to at risk youths.Seeing that I want to be a child psychologist I believe that this will perfectly link to my academic program.With the knowledge I will obtain from my courses, I will be able to understand why some people act out, I can then identify the problem and then find a way to help them improve their actions.This is well-written! You just need to research the school and say some specific things. Which groups of people do you want to help and how?
