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"What does Community mean to you?'' Conncoll supplement.


rahilsavani 4 / 12  
Dec 28, 2011   #1
Hey guys just finished My conncoll Supplement essay on: What does community mean to you?

"Unity"- This is the first thing that comes to my mind when I think about a community. I come from the Shia Imami muslim community of Uganda. This is a close knit society of people that come from different cultural, social and economical backgrounds. Based on my experiences with this community, when I think of it, a community is a group of people with diverse minds, different cultural backgrounds and diverse economic conditions coming together and helping to ease each other's problems, celebrate a fellow colleagues success and share each other's sorrows.

Living with the Shia Ismaili community over the years has helped me define the word community. When I usually walk into my community I see food being passed from house to house even among people who may not know each other that well. It is a mark of appreciation and a symbol of sharing. People watch over each other's kids when no one is at home. Most of them do not own cars but the ones that do are never reluctant to drive their neighbors to work or to the grocery store. When emergency strikes we all band together and ease each other's burden to make it easier. In college when I think about a community I see a group of friends, who share a meal together, share their troubles, throw around a Frisbee or dream about buying a big mansion together and living in it. Basically just living life together is what I can imagine a community to be.
seaweedsong 1 / 4  
Dec 28, 2011   #2
Based on my experiences with this community, when I think of it , a community is a group of people with diverse minds,

When I usually walk into my community I see food being passed from house to house even among people who may not even know each other. that well.

Some suggestions :) Good Essay!
Erica Htet 2 / 8  
Dec 29, 2011   #3
I really like your essay. Connecticut admission office will love it too. But I think you can better it by varying your vocabulary. You use the words 'different', 'diverse' and 'share' several times.
OP rahilsavani 4 / 12  
Dec 29, 2011   #4
Thanks with the editing Shamira :)
Thank you for pointing that out Htet, I would have never noticed that without your help :)


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