Prompt: Discuss the factors that have influenced your interest in studying business.
A doctor, a teacher-no, an astronaut. Like most children, my dream job changed on a day to day basis. I had never had a set career path for which I knew I would be destined. When it came time to pick a college major, I was lost. Do I pick a engineering, humanities, or maybe social sciences? Although my major was up in the air, I knew that I loved solving problems and the thrill of competition.
Life is filled with questions, and I have always enjoyed finding the answers. Whether it be figuring out a calculus problem or giving a friend advice, finding an answer gives me a feeling of satisfaction for which there is no substitute. This desire to solve any question which may arise has greatly influenced my choice of a career in business. In today's global economy, problems are constantly arising, and I believe the skill set I currently posses is perfectly suited for the challenges of our current marketplace. For example, I hope to one day help businesses maximize potential while making their company better off with the skills I will attain through a degree in business. Solving major issues, such as the efficiency of the business sector, would satisfy my desire to find answers while simultaneously completing a task I find fulfilling.
Competition is a driving force in my life as well as in our economy. I always strive to achieve at the highest level. Whether it be pushing myself to gain new tumbling skills to become a more competitive cheerleader or studying so I can get the best grades possible, I always strive to become more ambitious in every aspect of my life. This mentality is one which would be very beneficial in the business world. By pursuing a business degree, I can use my competitive nature to my benefit, helping me surpass not only my own expectations, but also an employer's. Whether I am given the task to create an innovative marketing campaign or to make a quality product while maximizing profits, the competitive aspect of my personality will drive me to be successful.
Business is a factor in everyday life. It a subject which is dynamic and complex. I want to pursue a subject in which I can continually improve and there is no limit to the knowledge which I can attain. Business fits perfectly with this goal. Although I am not completely sure what concentration within business I will ultimately end up with a degree in, business fits well with my personal goals and skills leading me to be confident with my choice in applying to the McDonough School of Business.
- Jenna, believe me when I tell you that you do not want your admissions officer to have the first impression of you as a clueless student who has no idea where she is headed in the future. You should definitely skip any part of the essay that makes your appear in a negative light. I would instead open the essay with the paragraph below this one which still mentions your desire to find answers to questions.
A doctor, a teacher-no, an astronaut. Like most children, my dream job changed on a day to day basis. I had never had a set career path for which I knew I would be destined. When it came time to pick a college major, I was lost. Do I pick a engineering, humanities, or maybe social sciences? Although my major was up in the air, I knew that I loved solving problems and the thrill of competition .
The rest of the essay actually answers the prompt quite well and should not be changed. You did a good job at explaining how your interest in business developed using the various influences in your life. By the way, don't you have a person whom you can mention as being an influence also? It would really help your essay to mention someone who influenced you to concentrate on the study of business. The influence of a family member will carry more weight than any Donald Trump, Steve Jobs, Marck Zuckerberg, or Bill Gates reference.
Hi! I agree with what Vangiespe said. Since you are not an undecided majoy(you said that you want to study business), you should get rid of the intro.You could use some vivid description of one of your activities related to your business interest instead.
For example, you could recall a scene that you use business knowledge or experience to solve real world challenges. It would show that you find real inspiration through studying business. Therefure, you would like to further pursue this area in the college.
Good luck :)