Georgia Tech Typical Day Essay
Prompt:
In our application review, we want to get to know you better. One way to do that is to understand a typical day for you. Please describe your typical day.
Essay:
At lunch, I'm a matchmaker, examining the young boys and girls in LFA with a calculating smile, noting their habits and desires. Sitting amongst friends chatting about the latest gossip in LFA, I'm sparking chemistry between a for and while loop for an "LFA Tinder" app I made with friends.
At sunset beside glass windows of the science center, I'm amateur Gregor Mendel, experimenting with the genomes and hosting the dual of the dominant vs the recessive. With friends in robotics, I'm putting in eye and hair colors of our teammates into my Punnett square app, jokingly predicting the appearance of their hypothetical child.
At 12:30 am, I'm a battleship commander, hunting behind fogs in the moonless night, with every position coming out of my mouth turn into quivering ashes and collapsing ships. While the virtual I am fighting in the battleship app I created, I'm fighting another battle against bugs and time, working at max-compacity detecting every bug before 1:30, when I can no longer get helped from my best friends: stack-overflow and GitHub.
Computer science is the witch that forges these souls together into me, along with these applications. When I lay my hands on the keyboard with NetBeans, Eclipse, or RStudio in front of me, I can feel the power computer science has given me, to turn me into different characters throughout the day and in turn, give convenience to those characters through my creations.@Lyanlima
Hello there. I'll provide you with writing feedback.
Firstly, I think that the general tone you're building is quite magnificent. You have a put-together tone that helps you establish your content in a meaningful manner. I would suggest trying to amplify the formality of your tone through ensuring that you have structured and concise sentences - doing so will help you curate strategic content.
Try to also evade being too creative sometimes because this can affect the formality. Try to be as balanced as possible when creating sentences.
Remember that this prompt is more of a push for you to be able to tell the story for them to get to know you better. The more specific you are, the better.
