'cooking helps me create' - common app extra curricular

please, help me with this essay .esp. grammer :) Thnxx

When I lay my dish on the plate I feel bliss like an artist must feel after completing a painting. For me cooking is the highest form of art which requires accuracy, precision and creativity. Yes, cooking helps me create along with satisfying my love for food.

I was always an ardent lover of food but, started to cook only after my grandma taught me the function of spices. From then on, I have been following my passion for cooking. I still experiment with recipes adding little bit of my own part to it. A sense of excitement and enthusiasm always back these experiments making me feel sedated. These experiments are ethereal where I concentrate to add a crisp to French- fries or give a beautiful yellow colour to boiled rice. I love to cook for my friends and my family it helps me give them a share of my pleasure of cooking.

Hi,
I must say that you did pretty well in this essay. I may suggest you make certain mini-changes:
I feel bliss like an artist must feel after completing a painting I feel the bliss that an artist feels after the completion of his masterpiece.

You might also want to add the thrilling comments you get from your 'customers'.

And finally, would you like to help me with mine?

Yes, it's really better than the last one. Do not use comma after 'but'. :)
You might consider this change if you want:

I was always an ardent lover of food but I began to persue my culinary passion when my grandma taught me the function of spices.

And lastly, this question is from my perspective, how the function of spices really sparked your interest in cooking? Might answer this in the essay, while you can just From then on, I have been following my passion for cooking.

Goodluck with your dream school!! :)

Strong essay, but I don't think you are using sedated correctly in your sentence
*adding a little bit
maybe change "my own part to it" of my own twist or something more artistic so that it go with the rest of your essay

Good Luck!

Its good, but just add a couple of words here and there to make it flow much better.

With time, I have acquired a better sense of accuracy and have learned to blend spices and other ingredients, while still experimenting with recipes by adding little bits of my own part to it.

I love to cook for my friends and my family because it helps me share my pleasure of cooking with the ones I love.

"A sense of excitement and enthusiasm always backs these experiments making me feel sedated." The words you used in the sentence contradict each other. While you feel excitement, you are also sedated? By using sedated, it sounds as though you are calm, not happy and proud as I think you wanted to describe.

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