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Of course, everyone has their ideas; I have many ideas right now. Why Penn essay

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Dec 23, 2014   #1
"The Admissions Committee would like to learn why you are a good fit for your undergraduate school choice (College of Arts and Sciences, School of Nursing, The Wharton School, or Penn Engineering). Please tell us about specific academic, service, and/or research opportunities at the University of Pennsylvania that resonate with your background, interests, and goals." 400-650 words

University Of Pennsylvania offers tremendous opportunities in my prime areas of interest which are mathematics and physics. In addition to the competent and research- oriented faculty of teachers, the university can also provide many opportunities for individual advancement through research. This particularly appeals to me as I have always been more interested in what is not known rather than what is known.

Learning just the concepts of the curriculum has never satisfied me and so I have always indulged in extracurricular research to a small extent. Whenever I come to know of a new mathematical formula or physical concept, I go home and look up its origins and the work done in proving it. This curiosity is what attracts me to a field like research. Reading proofs to revolutionary theories and ideas brings me such immense pleasure; I can only imagine what formulating some of my own ideas will be like.

Of course, everyone has their ideas; I have many ideas right now. But I can't give shape to these ideas without the proper direction or opportunities. Broad-ranged research programs like the University Scholars program at Upenn ensure that there will be no scarcity of opportunities. The mentoring, funding, not to mention the intellectual events held by this program, will facilitate my passage into the world of research and I will have a sense of the art by the time I get to graduate level. Also, due to the program's versatility, I will have the chance to go off-campus for research, which will gain me invaluable exposure.

I have always been impressed by professors and researchers who devote their time to discovering new theories and phenomenon even though they have no obligation to do so; they do it simply because they have a knack for it. When I see these professors in science videos on YouTube, when I see them smile and speak as enthusiastically about a mystery of the Universe as they would about their own child, I'm awed by their resolve and infatuation. So I would like to be mentored in the art of research by these great minds in the hope that I will be able inherit some of their enthusiasm and determination. Moreover, interaction with these professors at Upenn is facilitated by innovative programs like the 'Take a Professor to Lunch' program, which I find very unique as the professor can get to know the student on a more fundamental level which will obviously make him more inclined to work with the student .Of course, the learning experience will be tremendous. I will learn to think like a true scientist and innovator, what variables to consider during research and how to approach a particular project.

I think it's pretty clear that I will probably end up doing something related to physics and mathematics, but as of yet, I don't have anything specific in mind. I will probably do a double major in Physics and Mathematics at undergraduate level but the variety of research opportunities, ranging from Astrophysics to Particle physics, at Upenn will help me define a more specific area of interest in the long run. If I do get into research somewhere in the future, teamwork will be a vital aspect. The various student societies like the Penn State Society of Physics Students will be great place for intellectual interaction with other students who share the same passion as me, even though we don't have the same major. The experience will definitely be an important asset to my professional career. So I've come to the conclusion that if I do end up going to Upenn, the possibilities will be endless.

Any comments would be appreciated. Thanks.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Dec 23, 2014   #2
Hamza, I am worried about this essay of yours. While reading your essay, I noticed that you were not really offering any solid answers to the essay prompt. There were no examples of extra curricular activities and other types of participation that you had which helped to build the foundation of your chosen major. As I reached the end of your essay, I came to fully understand why that is so. You have not decided upon your major. That is the reason why the essay reads like an aimless and wandering bunch of words. There is no personal connection between you and the content of the paper. I believe this is because you are undecided about where your future should lead you. You do not even have any possible major in mind. This confusion has greatly affected the content of your essay. I could go on and on advising you about how you can correct your paragraphs and offer an insight into how you can tighten the essay but unless you decide upon a major, you won't be able to write an effective essay.

Look at your extra curricular activities and academic achievements. Find a program at the university that relates to these activities and interests on your end. Research how the program works and then develop a hypothetical situation or project that you feel can best show off how you might be able to utilize the university facilities. Your essay is just an empty shell at the moment. It doesn't tell us anything specific about how you will benefit from the education offered by the university.

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