TELL US ABOUT WHO YOU ARE. HOW WOULD YOUR FAMILY, FRIENDS, AND/OR MEMBERS OF YOUR COMMUNITY DESCRIBE YOU? IF POSSIBLE, PLEASE INCLUDE SOMETHING ABOUT YOURSELF THAT YOU ARE MOST PROUD OF AND WHY. (MAXIMUM 1500 CHARACTERS)
I have an intuitive mind with a strong creative side to myself which manifests itself in different ways. My family and friends would describe me as a dreamer, always lost in his own world.
I look at the world from my own perspective, finding patterns and relating ideas. It gives me immense joy in connecting ideas and thoughts.
I pursue photography as a hobby. It gives me the opportunity to relate moments with emotions and appreciate the little things of beauty which otherwise go unnoticed by. Once I was roaming about near the riverside with my camera, looking for interesting subjects. The portrait shots that I took of the tea-selling vendor, the fisherman or that of a man sitting in solitude in one of the benches are more than some pictures. They convey a lot of emotions and feelings which is hard to express in words. They were really excited about seeing someone clicking their photographs. One vendor asked me" Will I be famous? Click some more photos while I pose like this. "And another kid was running in front of me with his slingshot wishing to get his photo clicked. I was happy to bring some joy in their monotonous lives.
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There is a lack of reference to a multi-faceted personality on the part of the applicant. The reviewer is looking for a far more definitive response to "Who are you?" than a 2 sentence reference, devoid of any explanation of this point of view on the part of the observers. I also cannot understand why you are discussing a hobby as something you are proud of. There is no achieving moment that would be described as character driven in that response. It does not tie in with the "who you are" point of view. The achievement should be based on the character of the person or a particular achievement that the people around him/her would consider to be of a notable reference due to his character or motivation for the accomplishment. The accomplishment has to tell the reviewer who you are, based on character, not hobby. Who you are based upon your understanding of yourself does not satisfy the reviewer. He is not interested in how you see yourself. He is only interested in how people view you as a person, child, community member, or student. The response provided is good, but cannot be used in totality for this particular prompt.