The Common Application Essay
Candidates must choose one topic and respond. Responses must be at least 250 words.
Now you tell me which one it fit. =D
Even after you have figured out, there is much work to be done to polish your essay.
First of all, there are a lot of ";" in your essay. Change all to either "," or ".".
After 9 months the room was still alike except there was some weird and wonderful emotion attached with it.
"Wonderful" alone will be good enough.
all my hours of remodeling was gone; like "abracadabra" and whoshh!!!
Either one of the clause will be good enough.
and it was not until 5pm I returned to muy room
Trying to be cute here yo? ;D
My friends were not angry with me but with my action;it had hurt them.
My friends were not angry with me but my action had hurt them.
I like the way you used the cubicle as a symbol for friendship, maybe elaborate a little further on the fun times you guys had in the cubicle?
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