Here we were taught about how God loves us and because of which we should love everyone
This sounded a bit awkward when I read it over. Maybe you can rephrase it to "Here
, were were...and because of
that we should love everyone"
I'm not sure if "that" is grammatically correct, but if it is then you should change it.
This also sounded a little awkward as well:
hough I wasn't religious I was instilled with great values about how to treat others.
Maybe you can say: "While I wasn't religous, Church instilled great values of kindness and respect in me" or something like that
In your writing you use "we" a lot. Some of them should be changed to "I" instead. Also when you were describing your school, you should change small to diverseness. There should also be no numbers in your writing. Instead of 8th grade, write eight grade. Instead of 3, write three.
Omit this, because this is already assumed from you statement before:
Pope John really didn't have that must diversity in the classroom race wise
Then you can join the two sentenced together
After struggling social
should be be changed to "After struggling socially"
I found myself interested with just not was going on in tv shows and games, but also what was happening on with the world around me.
Maybe you can change "just not" to "not only"
Insert some more commas in your writing, but dont go crazy. For example this part,
Being an American you grow up with this feeling
would sound much smoother with a comma after America.
I hope this helped and I wish you luck. I know how stressful these times can be