I am not trying to do a sap story, because I honestly didn't want to go that route. If anything, I made the people in mine seem nier than they actually are. But hopefully you guys like it :)
Any feedback please :)
Prompt #1:
Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
The room fills with talk of sports, school, and his level of intoxication when he agreed to marry my mother, which he loves to joke about. Kitchen conversations are not rare with my dad and they usually end up being about my mother. How these two opposite people have been married for over 30 years still puzzles me to this day. It is counter-intuitive, yet I encounter it everyday. And although I might complain about living in a circus of paradoxes, I know that it has helped me become an open-minded and passionate person; I am able to understand situations from multiple perspectives. I am proud to be the child of two opposite people, because I got the best of both worlds.
Both of my parents came from El Salvador during the Civil War during the 1980's between the militaristic government and the communist intruders. Ironically, my parents are like these two opposing forces. My mom is controlling and disciplined, while my dad is more relaxed and a bit stubborn and resilient to her commands. They are each other's enemy and I am left victim to choose a side and be persecuted by the other. It is hard to choose, of course. I have decided, though, not to choose one side, but both. I take the positive aspects of my parents' personalities to help me become the person I want to be. When they argue, I listen to the arguments they make. This helps me make different points of view of situations. I have always been fascinated by criminal cases and learning about the different sides of a story and living with two opposite parents has helped me understand that there is never only one side. Eventually, I hope that this will help me when I become a lawyer.
It is rare to have a moment of silence with my mother, who is like an army general. Being the eldest sister of 9 siblings, my mother had to take on many responsibilities and pressures as a young woman. As a result, even more pressure has been placed on me to make her proud. Pressure is something most of us would likely want to avoid, but I realized that without the overbearing nature of my mother, I would have never been able to discipline myself into spending most of my nights studying. "No te dejas," she says, "Don't let yourself." She has taught me not to let anyone bring me down and to defend what I believe in.
My father on the other hand is almost the complete opposite: calm. He does his best to avoid confrontation with my mother, though he is rarely successful. He deals with her tough temperament for one reason. "No matter how terrible the situation is, you always stay to protect your child." For him to be able to stay married with my mom for so long has made me feel as if I can face obstacles in my life that may seem impossible. I have taken this conviction to heart by working very hard in school. Although I may not always receive the grade I desire, it pushes me to do better on the next test. It doesn't make me pessimistic, rather optimistic that I can do better in the future.
Though my world may seem like a bipolar household, it is what has shaped me. And while I sit with my dad discussing whatever topics that may come up, he usually interrupts me with "Today you are the daughter of the trucker. Tomorrow, I'll be the father of the lawyer." Goodnight dad, I'll see you tomorrow.
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Honestly, your essay is great and enjoyable. The language is clear, concise, and flows dynamically. Unlike many other essays that I have read, I didn't feel the urge to skip sentences because I enjoyed every words of it. I can imagine your parents warring each other everyday :D
You provided a clear picture about your parents. However, I didn't catch a clear picture about your identity. Try to reduce your parents' portion and enhance yours; this essay should be about you.
Anyway, your last sentence "Goodnight dad, I'll see you tomorrow" was a stroke of genius.
Good luck and have a nice holiday. Please help with mine as well :)
