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Dear future college buddy - Stanford essay


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Dec 23, 2012   #1
Dear future college buddy,

I'm so excited about college! We are going to have so much fun! Sure, we will have to study because we are at the prestigious Stanford, but still, we are going to be living in a college campus in California. Party time.

A little bit about myself, I want to major in computer science so yes I am nerdy. But, like most Comp-Sci people I'm pretty chill. I know that people think the typical computer science major is a reclusive bore who sits in front of his computer all day. Not me. I'm a very outward person - I'm in Model UN. MUN kids have to be loud to do well.

I suppose like other MUN kids, I also love to watch TED Talks. TED Talks give us a new perspective on world events which we can then use in competitions. So, don't be surprised if I'm walking around trying to convince people of some innovative idea. At the same time, people say it's weird that I love to randomly incorporate "wise" phrases that I hear on TED into everything I say. It's not weird; it's unique.

Now, let's get down to business - food. I am vegetarian so I think we should have two separate microwaves, unless of course you are a vegetarian too. I know that upperclassmen choose roommates at Stanford, but I have no idea whether they take into account diet restrictions so I have no idea whether or not you are a vegetarian. If you are, great. If not, like I said, I'm chill with that.

I'm Indian (the ones Columbus was looking for), so obviously, I love Mexican food. Thus every Saturday night, I like to watch some random movie and make myself an awesome burrito. I suppose one unique insight I'm bringing with me is my burrito recipe. Believe me when I say I make a mean burrito - my high school friends actually beg me to bring them burritos from time to time.

I can't wait to meet you in person. I know we will be great friends.

**my name**

Hi guys, Im not really sure how to end this - any ideas? Also, any other criticism about anything is awesome. thanks.
nairbear68 6 / 29 6  
Dec 23, 2012   #2
(the ones Columbus was looking for),

hilarious line! but it doesnt make any sense whatsoever that because youre indian you like mexican food...
also, i suggest deleting that "party time" line. though it's a letter to a roommate, its still the adcom that's reading it.

as for the ending, it doesn't really matter. what you have is fine, because it's just a letter. simply sign off with "regards, name"

and please help me with my upenn essay!
OP I like Cookies 3 / 5  
Dec 23, 2012   #3
the "so obviously, i love mexican food" is meant to be a joke. You would think that because im indian, I would love Indian food but nope, Im a Mexican food nut (which is actually the way many indian people are - we love mexican food).
Silleth 3 / 10 3  
Dec 23, 2012   #4
Sounds good but contraction in formal essays are a big no-no!
So change that I'm to an I am and change that can't into a cannot


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