Speech & Debate - Common App EC's Short Essay

Here's what I have so far:

Participating in the Speech and Debate team has been a major part of my high school life. Constant practices transformed me into a much more confident public speaker. With individual events, I discovered the opportunity to incorporate my love for writing. Often times I enjoyed the freedom to express my opinions and persuade my audience. The responsibilities that came along with the leadership position of event captain also contributed much to my personal growth. I was to run weekly practices and help respective event members improve their scripts. The most challenging part was to motivate and discipline the group as a whole, especially when everyone was caught up with schoolwork and other activities. There were times when arguments ensued and I had to keep peace. Through experiences, I learned to keep a positive attitude, remain calm under pressure, and work ahead of everyone else to set a good example. (149 words)

I feel like it's very vague without much content matter. Is this a good topic for the essay? Is there any way I can improve this?

I also have have other extracurricular activities, such as choir and church fellowship. I don't want to do choir because I have other supplement essays already focusing on music (I'm majoring in music). As for church, it seems too broad for 150 words.

Any help would be appreciated!

It's a bit dull, really. Your writing is clear but it lacks vivacity. Either rewrite it or pick another topic. They need to "get" how excited or passionate you are about what you do. Maybe you could focus on a specific event to pull your reader into the essay; your story?

Your topic sentence should be more forceful to grab attention. Explain how and why S and D caused personal growth. Made you speak up, better writer, etc.

Use an outline with strong TS then branch downward. Your essay seems too choppy

It is a good essay and you have developed good skills like leadership, public speaking, writing. I would try to organize better and add more anecdotal experiences.

Can you review my essays - Thanks. Good luck