The Latin words "Mores" and "Artes" play side by side throughout my lifelong journey.
nice!
This is why commas were invented:
Artes, the beauty of intellectual pursuits, is realized
only after a strong character or mores is built. --- I added a word, too...
When I first read the topic of this ess
ay, I thought, "Wh at have I done...
But after the sentence about mores being a prerequisite for artes, you need to give a sentence about your own life as an example.
Give more examples, more action verbs, more imagery words, and more discussion of your intentions for the next few years! The last paragraph especially needs to be developed more. :-)