Heres what I have so far, my question is, have I answered the prompt?
I have posted the prompt below followed by my essay.
Any comments and suggestion will be appreciated. Thank you in advance.
In her book Original Kin , Marian Sandmaier has written that "A sibling may be the sole keeper of one's core identity, the only person with the keys to one's unfettered, more fundamental self." Describe your relationship with your siblings. Do you think birth order has had a significant impact on who you are? If you are an only child, how has the lack of a sibling shaped your identity?
The relationship with my siblings is not the best but I would say that it's decent. The relationship with my older sister and my younger brother is more pleasant than the chaotic relationship with my fourteen year old brother. I strongly believe that birth order has had an impact in who I am today. I know that I would be a different person if it wasn't for my brothers who I love and care for.
My sister is the person I go to when I need someone to talk to, the one who's always there and knows what to say. My older sister has impacted who I am by teaching me the value of pride and hard work and like any other older sister she has been a role model. She would wear something blue so there I was trying to find something close to that color and style; even thought she would get mad. I grew up seeing her ambition for studying and working hard. This taught me that through hard work anything is possible. When I see what my sister has accomplished in life because of hard work it influences me to do my best at everything and always work hard, no matter how difficult the task may be.
Since we were little my older sister would take care of my brother and me; she was like a second mother, she would feed us and make sure I had done my homework before I could go to sleep. Because we were raised by a single mother, one job was not enough. I believe that the reason I don't get along with my teenage brother is simply because since I can remember he would always hit me and bother me. When we were small he would always do stuff that bother me and would sometimes hit me for no reason; these are the memories I have of our childhood and because there not so pleasant I never came around to liked being around him. I wished that this had never happened because, I strongly believe that, it created a strong dislike in me towards my brother. Unlike my sister who she was like a second mother she would always defend me and would tell my brother to stop bothering me.
My younger brother, who is six years old, has though me the value of caring and thanks to him I believe I'm more compassionate to others especially kids. Now that I'm older and see life a different way, having my little brother in my life has been a blessing. He always makes me laugh and I will always love him. I think that the purpose of my little brother coming to life is, letting me know that there is someone who needs me and loves me.
First, very interesting prompt. I have never seen this one before. It' refreshing.
Your first sentence, "The relationship with my siblings is not the best but I would say that it's decent." I wouldn't say this is a very adaquete topic sentence for the rest of your essay. You talk about how your sister is caring and protective, this sentence makes your sister sound so-so.
I strongly believe that, (take out) it created a strong dislike in me towards my brother this was the reason why I stronlgy disliked my brother.
You need a stronger conclusion.
Bring together your sister and yur two brothers and write a sentence of two about how they make you feel and how you feel about them.
