There are two "essays". These are just one paragraph each, and I just wanna know if there are improvements I could make. Any helpful comments are appreciated. Thank you!
Here is the first one's prompt: Engineering leaders do more than just solve technical problems. What kinds of experiences, inside and outside of the classroom, would you want to explore to enhance your studies?
My response: Though I am undecided as to what kind of engineering I want to do, I know that I want designing to be a part of it. As a child I had this notion that engineering was only to do with math, computers, and guys. When I learned that there was much more to it than those three things, I was excited, mainly by the fact that there is room for artistic people. I also want to be able to have hands on experience, which would help me decide if what I chose is truly the best fit for me. To broaden my abilities and enhance my studying, I would like to take a drawing class, and find an internship opportunity. With these two experiences, I feel I would be much better prepared for the real world than without them.
The second prompt: Engineers have sometimes been stereotyped as "nerds" or "geeks." Do you embrace or reject that stereotype? Why?
My response: I was never a "geek", and only sort of a "nerd". I am not tech savvy, or math-crazy. However, a friend of mine who I can safely say is a nerd has welcomed me to "nerd-land" several times throughout the years in high school. A lot of my friends are hard workers, and they have inspired me to work hard as well. I consider myself a semi-nerd-someone who isn't widely known (among classmates) as a nerd, but who can and will work just as hard as someone who is widely known as a nerd. I visit "nerd-land" frequently, and am happy to be there.
Try to do some research about USC so you can incorporate them into your essay and talk about how whatever you find will help you in your interests.
for the second prompt you didn't reallly answer the question of why you would embrace/reject that stereotype. I'm thiking you will be leaning more towards the reject? if so talk about the most important aspects of engineering and things like creativity and other qualities
minijuey, yes, I have researched about USC, it's mentioned in a separate essay though. Since they didn't exactly state that I needed to say why USC is the place for me, I didn't take it that way. But thank you, I'll think about it some more!
Oh, and awlee, I feel like I did answer it...I said that I don't mind being in nerd-land, in other words, I accept where I am. Even though I am not a nerd, really, I don't mind being with them. If I said I rejected it, it'd be a lie since I don't mind it at all. But still, thank you for your thoughts =)
