Besides these valid reasons for considering Emory as a possible college choice, why is Emory University a particularly good match for you?
This sentence by the admission office is not written correctly!
Picture perfect weather, great location and
I think you should not include this part. It's what they talked about in the prompt... and it seems like you can't come up with an original thought for the intro.
I always had a desire to help people, even
it be a small thing in small matters.
Whether it be... --- this kind of sentence is used too often in admission essays.
In this essay, I am looking for a main theme, and main idea that is the central truth for the whole essay. What is the main idea of "why Emory is a good match for you?"
I think the idea is related to your plan. I think you should write about your philosophy of medicine, and also the life philosophy that compels you to help people, and then describe ways the Emory is better than _______ college and the University of _________ for helping you to enact your plan.
Also, I think you would enjoy reading the introduction chapters to Mere Christianity by Lewis, because he makes an intriguing argument involving this desire to help others and do what is right.