jadajjada 1 / - Jan 2, 2011 #1This is my supplement essay for University of San Diego. Any edits and suggestions are appreciated!Question:As a Catholic University committed to building a more inclusive community, we value students with diverse backgrounds and experiences. Briefly explain how your unique background and interests will contribute to our communityI have always lived in a small Norwegian community, but when I became a teenager my life changed forever, in a way that I never expected.As a thirteen-year-old I was given the opportunity to travel across the globe to attend a snowboarding camp in British Columbia, Canada. It was quite a challenge for an inexperienced Norwegian boy but I enjoyed it so much that I repeated this trip for the next three years! I grew a lot from these yearly excursions and so felt confident to try a new experience, so my last trip was very different. I attended a language course in Spain for three weeks.So why did I do this, every time all alone? The answer is simple:My burning desire to try new experiences and acquire new friends. My travels so far have allowed me to do just that.I have met people with different backgrounds and from every corner of the world, and even though I came from a place which is very different from them, I still got along great and enjoyed the experience. I have made friends with those whom I am still in contact with till this day.I believe that my experiences are similar to those I will find on a college campus. I enjoy meeting others with diverse backgrounds, as well as sharing my own experiences about life in Norway.I left home all alone and returned with the knowledge of having acquired new friends and the experiences.I am planning to do the same at USD. I hope my unique background can bring a good contribution to the college community and that I can acquire a great learning experience too!
Laubach 5 / 7 Jan 2, 2011 #2I grew a lot from these yearly excursions and so felt confident to try a new experience, so my last trip was very different. I attended a language course in Spain for three weeks.This is a bit wordy and doesn't flow. I'd rewrite it to something along these lines: Through these yearly excursions I grew more confident. This confidence led me to embark on my most recent trip to a language course in Spain....or something along those lines.