XXX Engineering celebrates innovative problem solving that helps people, communities...the world. Consider your ideas and aspirations and describe how a XXX Engineering education would allow you to leverage technological problem-solving to improve the world we live in.
As my neighbor, Mr.Bhattarai, had already threatened me a couple of times to not mess with his private (highly secured) network, I-a mischievous 8th grader- used to hole up in my bedroom when he frequently complained my parents about his dysfunctional ADSL router: by plotting a simple brute-force attack to the Subisu's(a National ISP) network-bridge being incognito in the workgroup, I had gained access to his Wireless Nanostation and traced the family's entire devices' MAC addresses following the restriction of access from their own wireless network by activating the built-in MAC filtration protocol. With diverse technical skillsets regarding network topologies, I, however, never practiced severe cyber felony which could critically injure several institutions' database and privacy as well as lead me behind bars. This juvenile delinquency of manipulating wireless networks in vicinity-which bummed out my family and neighbors-was maneuvering my enthusiasm towards something groundbreaking in Wireless technology: Extreme Strengthening of Digital Forensics and Security. From controversial incidents like Russian intrusion in American election to global economic treachery of Panama Papers, this omnipresence of vulnerability in cyber security psyched me up to enlighten myself with exclusive technical knowledge on Cyber Forensics as well as dedicate my time and labor for tightening of network security in my locality rather than the usual commitment towards cyber-infraction. I have concluded that for strict maintenance of upright cyber-world, classical digital communication paradigms ought to be revised for the nanoscale.
XXX's prestigious engineering facility equipped with state-of-the-art technology as well as interdisciplinary and pioneering approach towards education is what I need to kick off my pursuit of lessening cybercrimes, not to mention perfecting database management and web transmission. Under the supervision of world's finest educators, researchers and industrial moguls, I will not only be getting mileage out of top-notch engineering facilities, but I'll also be teaming up with Cyber Security & Cloud Computing enthusiasts from other well-rounded institutions and private tech partners. I was hold spellbound when I discovered David Lifka's disclosure of Red Cloud, an on-demand research collaboration cloud platform, which would not only allow junior techies like me to exploit multiple highly functional network infrastructures economically, but also promote the smart investment on technological quests by discouraging redundant investigations and availing open access to exceptional hardware/software platforms. Moreover, the infrastructures ofXXX Center of Advanced Computing- likethe Red Cloud, DataDirect Networks- could enlighten me about the futuristic technologies with their sustainable employment for the upliftment of Cyberspace as well as construct an ideal framework for me to work on the modelling of a supreme Nano-scientific Computer Network. XXX's celebrated personalities of Nanoscale Science & Technology facility like Richard Hennig and Greg Fuchs would be my apt mentors both in/out of the classroom as well as for the exploitation of sophisticated laboratory resources- be it for designing molecular transceivers and motors for calcium signaling of short-range or crafting electromagnetic channel models and protocols for an efficacious long-range pheromonal Nano networking.
After an epoch of miscellaneous scientific experiences at XXX, I am looking forward to being professionally involved in a major Nano-scientific project on substituting networking entities with nanoengineered technology and revolutionizing the conventional digital storage and processing mechanisms for the sake of cybersecurity. By following a biologically-hybrid principle of miniaturizing current microelectronic and micro-electro-mechanical technologies accompanied with the realization of nanomachines from the molecular components, I am determined to invent invulnerable systems, superbly optimized in terms of architecture, power consumption and communication, and motivate their utilization as building blocks for new energy-efficient and eco-friendly initiatives. This undertaking will ensure a breakthrough in economics, sustainable commercial growth, homeland security, healthcare accompanied with the lessening of major cyber offenses in today's digital empire, simultaneously, via heavily encrypted channels for online data transmission. Despite being an unprecedented communication paradigm, Nanonetwork demands an interdisciplinary approach with backings from highly experienced and qualified group of elites equipped with satisfactory infrastructural commodities, which I readily discover at XXX's engineering department.
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4783 Nanda, there is only one component missing in this essay that would have made it perfect. You did not discuss the possible solution to cyber security that you feel you can contribute to society after you complete this course. Bear in mind that the prompt is asking you to perform a specific task. That of leveraging technical problem solving in order to improve the world we live in. Therefore a hypothetical solution can be presented in response to the prompt. If I were you though, I would not go into a hypothetical scenario for the response.
My understanding of the prompt is that it is asking you to present your possible college thesis research as the possible solution to the problem. You have already mentioned a few times that you have experience in low level cyber hacking. So why not go a step further and inform the reviewer as to how you plan to use your education to limit the possibility of cyber attacks in the future? If you wish to make your essay stand out from the other applicants, then let the reviewer know that the reason why you are pursuing this degree in college is because you have a plan, think outside of the box for the presentation of a solution, to prevent cyber hacking in the future. However, to make it a reality, you need to gain a solid academic foundation in the field first.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 4783 Nanda, paragraph two should be very specific in presenting your possible college thesis. That is what I meant by my statement. I am sorry if I did not make it clear to you. This is the actual point in your essay where you can clearly represent the reasons why you chose the university and how you plan to leverage the technological problem solving education and training that you will be receiving from the university. If you could just clarify that the reason you will pursue these involvements at the university is because of the clear connection between nano science and cyber technology, then you will be able to present a more thorough and clear objective to the reviewer. Like I previously mentioned, that is the only portion of the essay that you need to clarify. The reason for your study and the outcome of the research you intent to pursue as a college student will help to cement the reason behind your desire to pursue this specific engineering major at this university.
@Holt I made the following change for clarification of my "Merging Nanoscience with CyberSecurity" purpose.
Moreover, the infrastructures of Center of Advanced Computing-Red Cloud, DataDirect Networks- along with those dedicated for Nano-scientific researches could enlighten me about the futuristic technologies regarding their sustainable employment towards conglomeration of Nano-engineering and Cyber Security: synthesis of a supreme Nano-scientific Computer Network.
