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Determined; Passionate; Open-minded - boston: three word that describe you best


ginny2345 12 / 22  
Dec 20, 2009   #1
Determined; Passionate; Open-minded

These words are the pillars of my life. Born and raised in the most populous country in Africa, I watched people suffer without help. Being fortunate to be born into a family that had the means to care for me, I strived to help the people of my country in any way that I could. My father served as my inspiration. As a doctor, he gave all his heart into saving people's lives. As I grew up, I watched my father become a great man. I have always been determined to be like him. Following and achieving my dreams have been my primary goal in life.

My passion is my country. My first dreams as a child and now as a teenager have been greatly inspired by my determination to make my country and its people better. This dream has given me a definite and straight- forward outlook on life and plays a major part on who I am today and what I represent as a person.

My open-mindedness makes me diverse. As a child and a teenager I travelled around the world, to different places. I have met new people, learnt new things and have been exposed to new ideas. What makes me special is the fact that I learn how to inculcate these ideas and values which I have learnt, during my various journeys, into my life. Some of these ideas and values have also changed and improved my perspective on some issues of the world.

My determination, passion and open-mindedness, makes me suitable for BU's community. I bring with me a different culture and different values. Being from a country which is known for its diverse ethnic groups, cultures and traditions enables me to add a touch of difference and to share various interesting cultural practices with the cultural community of Boston University

Boston University has a diverse community of students which I hope to be part of. Therefore, I look forward to learning from its students in other to better myself as a person and to improve my country, Nigeria. My perspective on certain issues and the world in general which I have gathered throughout my life is unique. I intend to infuse all that i have learnt, in any way that I can into my life in Boston University.

Trying to help the people of my country through various voluntary services has also given me the experience I need to become a part of the BU community. Being a part of the community service centre would enable me to share what I have learnt while helping the people of my country and in turn learning new ideas and ways to help and improve my country.

Determined; Passionate; Open-minded Is who I am.

this is just a draft..i m not really sure about this approach, but i have to know what you all think first. grammatical corrections will be appreciated!
daft123 5 / 8  
Dec 20, 2009   #2
i think this essay is pretty good but when you say places. I have met new people, learnt new things and have been exposed to new ideas you should make it in the present tense rather than past tense because colleges seem to like that more so say Through meeting new people and learning new things and my exposure to new ideas...
lowcal 12 / 27  
Dec 20, 2009   #3
I intend to infuse all that i have learnt, in any way that I can into my life in Boston University.

that should be capital

Open-minded Is who I am.

lower case "I"

overall i like the approach of your essay. you targeted how you could contribute to BU which is good.

i agree with the present tense as the above, it makes the read feel like their part of your story


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