TELL US MORE ABOUT ONE OR TWO ACTIVITIES LISTED ABOVE THAT ARE MOST IMPORTANT TO YOU. PLEASE EXPLAIN THE ROLE YOU PLAYED AND WHAT YOU LEARNED IN THE PROCESS. YOU WILL BE ASKED FOR A REFERENCE WHO CAN SPEAK TO YOUR RESPONSE. (MAXIMUM 2100 CHARACTERS)
One of the activities that meant the most to me was my involvement in the "International Space settlement Design Competition". I was involved in it for more than a year in my high school as part of my school team. We were required to propose the design, development, and operations planning of a settlement in space. I was a member of the operations department which called for a lot of research into material sourcing, water purification and supply system, waste management, power generation and supply, effective agricultural practices, etc. Not only did I have to find optimal solutions but also had to ensure that it was economic. Starting from the national round to the international we designed settlements around earth, on moon and around moon.
Working on this mission for one year, taught me the values of Commitment and what working towards a goal feels like. There have been many moments of uncertainty during this period, but we tacked them together as a team. The confidence which we had in ourselves, by giving our best, kept us going. I learnt to work in a team and made many new friends, thereby improving my social skills. Moreover, I learnt to deal with deadlines and stress at an elevated level. There have been moments when major issues in design were detected at the last moment, conflicts arose between ourselves, and I had to spend sleepless nights working with my teammates. Keeping cool and finding workarounds, making minor compromises to fix major flaws in time, predicting potential risks to the deadline ahead of time- these are the skills which I gained working. As a result, it turned out to be a lot more than just an enriching academic experience. Now, I feel much more confident in interacting and networking with people and expressing myself.
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This is a highly impressive activity to mention in relation to your chosen major. It would have been more advantageous to you if you had lessened the "we" discussion and focused clearly on the "I" part. As in, discuss your specific contributions to the team and why these were of vital importance. This is one time when the "we" reference is not a benefit to the discussion presentation. In addition to that observation, you also have to mention the person that the reviewer will be contacting to verify this activity. That would be the academic adviser of the team. This may be the teacher / coach, school principal, or any officer of the school who may be able to add information to this statement. Other than these comments, the information presented is quite strong, impressive, and, I believe, worthy of follow up inquiries on the part of the reviewer.