It was during my undergraduate studies when I was disrupted yet susceptible by the development trajectories of Indian economy since Independence. When I was studying a semester course on "Development Process and Social Movements in Contemporary India", one issue specifically really made me question my own self and that was of farmer suicides in the country. After diligently following the newspaper articles by P. Sainath, one of the first Indians who has worked on the agrarian crisis extensively, and perusaling ( PERUSAL IS THE WORD I WANTED TO USE) Ranjana Padhi's , an Independent writer and activist , "Those Who Did Not Die:Impact of the Agrarian Crisis on Women in Punjab" revelated (REVELATION IS THE NOUN I WANT TO USE) the reality of women caught in the vortex of the agrarian crisis. I discovered that the peasant women are often not part of the frame when we are doing a research on agrarian crisis and its impact in India. And, this is why I felt that it is necessary to understand the delicate situation of the "farm widows" who have suffered from the agrarian crisis since 1991. I want to pursue my Masters in Development Studies and get to the roots of the problem as to why are we not sensitive towards those who didn't die? Why are we not giving agricultural women workers who form the backbone of Indian agriculture any attention? Why is a peasant woman denied space in her own society? My core research interest would be studying Indian peasant agriculture through a feminist perspective. Their reality and struggle compels the framing of new questions for the women's movement and the seeking of novel forms of redress and strategies to overcome their plight. Hence, It is this challenging issue to which I intend to contribute by evolving meaningful and optimal solutions through learning about theories and programs that can help me undo or prevent further damage to the women in this sector of our society.
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This are my thoughts on your essay. Hargun, the only thing that I see as an issue is the use of the words, some of the words are not in the right place or not in the right thought of the sentence, the way you want it to appear in your essay.
I hope that my remarks helped.
thank you for correcting the errors. :-) but I need help in using words like perusal, revelation - guide me how can i use them in this structure effectively.
Need your advice ASAP @justivy03
Hi Hargun, I know you are waiting for Ivy's response but since she hasn't gotten around to it yet, let me try and ofer you some help from my point of view. I'll just address the issues that you are concerned with in the parenthesis of your statement.
After diligently following the newspaper articles by P. Sainath, one of the first Indians who has worked on the agrarian crisis extensively, and perusaling ( PERUSAL IS THE WORD I WANTED TO USE) PERUSING
- ALTHOUGH, I BELIEVE THAT THE WORD YOU SHOULD BE USING HERE IS READING INSTEAD. PERUSING IS SIMILAR TO ONLY BROWSING THROUGH AN ARTICLE. YOU WANT TO SAY THAT YOU READ THE ARTICLE FROM BEGINNING TO END.
Ranjana Padhi's , an Independent writer and activist , "Those Who Did Not Die:Impact of the Agrarian Crisis on Women in Punjab" revelated REVELATION IS THE NOUN I WANT TO USE)REVEALED
- USE PAST TENSE SINCE YOU ALREADY DID THIS ACTIVITY.
I hope I was able to help you out a bit while waiting :-)
Aiden, thank you for taking my remarks into consideration and as you can see there is a lot of help that you can get from EF contributors, now let me share my thoughts on this part of the essay.
- After diligently following the newspaper articles by P. Sainath, one of the first Indians who has worked on the agrarian crisis extensively, and perusalingperusing (is the right for of this word in conjunction to your sentence )
- "Those Who Did Not Die:Impact of the Agrarian Crisis on Women in Punjab" revelatedrevealed ( this is the right form for this word ) the reality of women caught in the vortex of the agrarian crisis.
The correction above should be perfect for your essay.
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Once again thanks a lot @justivy03 and@vangiespen, your team has always helped me so a big hug to you all!! You all are doing an amazing job and we genuinely love you guys thank you for helping us out! :)
