The question is:
"We are looking for leaders committed to their home community.
Why would you be a great participant in this program?
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Thank you very much in advance!
I knew about the UGRAD program through a friend that I got to know in the ASEAN-India Student Exchange Program. She told me about America, what she's got after the program and I know that I want to take part in this unique program.
Firstly, Global UGRAD Program will take me to meet lots of new people. As a leader of my class for 4 years and just being elected to be the vice president of my English Club, I learn that having chances to communicate with different people is precious. When meeting new people, I not only know their faces, their appearances but also, I know about their influent stories and their understanding about subjects, which teach me special lessons, give me opportunities to train my soft skills. Listening to my friends, for example, give me comprehension about an actual student life, living away from parents and having to take care of our own, which make I understand the difficulty they've been through, sympathize with them and be more grateful for what I've got. Through times working with various partners, I've acquired and developed many skills such as neutralizing debates, negotiating, etiquette and so on. I believe, through the other participants in UGRAD and people I will meet in the days I live in America could bring me not only wide perspective to complete myself, but also friendships to keep for a long life.
Secondly, this program will take me to the United State, a totally different culture, different learning system, and teaching method. Through the special chance which brought me to India, I've grasped that any culture has traits worthy to learn. America is definitely not an exception. I want to learn from the American how they encourage independent thinking, how they promote teamwork and moreover, how they become great. For a long time, America is considered as one of the dream destinations for people all around the world. Especially for a medical student like me, studying updated guideline given American associations, reading reference material taken from American authors' books, I always desperately want to try learning in that environment. UGRAD would make my dream come true.
Thirdly, thanks to the UGRAD program, I will have more occasions to commit to community services. Being a medical student, spending enormous time on books and hospitals, and also being the leader of a class and a club, I have to manage time strictly to balance my work, which proceeds the restricted number of community services that I've joined in. Through these occasions in America, I will not only be able to bring positive things to more people but also learn about organizing events and programs so I can bring that information back to create more activities for my club as the Children English Teaching that we did last summer.
Taking part in UGRAD will not only help me to learn but also give me opportunities to devote. With enthusiasm, with eager and with knowledge, I will work hard to co-operate with American associations in implementing new ideas, carrying out new programs, try to help people with my best as possible. I could bring Vietnamese colors and identity to introduce to friends from hundreds of countries in general and from America in specific, could connect with them, forming a network to support each other in need in the future.
In summary, with long-time experience in leading people, with a desire to learn from a great developed country, America, and with my capability to devote to the communities I've been attached to and I will be in, I believe I'm one of the most competent participants of the program.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 Thao, the slant of your discussion is incorrect. Since the program is looking for participants who are known as community leaders or are dedicated to helping the community, you should be presenting your essay in a manner that supports that objective. You must discuss your current community service participation and then align the participation with reasons that would make you a strong UGrad participant.
Do a comparison discussion. Think of your strengths as a community leader or civic minded member of the community. What makes you a good member of your community? How does that translate into your potential as a UGrad participant? Think of how your community participation can translate into a skill, talent, or diverse participation as a member of the program? What is unique about you? How will that add to the UGrad experience not only for you, but the other participants as well?
The community element is missing in the overall presentation that you made. It is not aligned with the prompt expectations and requirements. You must adjust your presentation to suit the needs of the application essay. Write a new one instead of trying to edit this essay to make it work for the prompt. It will make everything a lot easier for you to accomplish.
