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Dickinson students shall become globally engaged citizen leaders


jacob5642 1 / 7  
Dec 22, 2009   #1
Dickinson College founder, statesman and physician Benjamin Rush wrote several essays on education for this new nation. Listed below are three of Rush's philosophies. Choose ONE and explain how that philosophy relates to your talents, goals and the reasons you chose to apply to Dickinson.

*Dickinson students shall become globally engaged citizen leaders.

"We will not rest until we reach a permanent agreement [with the Palestinians] that would secure a safe future for our children and that would provide us with renewed hope to live in a region where people lead a life of co-operation and not, God forbid, where blood is shed," said former Prime Minister and General, Yitzhak Rabin. Unfortunately, Rabin was assassinated before he was able to accomplish his goal; I willingly carry the weight of his task.

My determination, and Tikva: hope, for a peace between the warring nations of Israel and Palestine has been misunderstood for naiveté; however, after spending this past summer on Kibbutz Tzuba, and speaking with the people there and in the surrounding Arab villages, I see the reality of peace that Rabin did when shaking hands with Arafat.

I have taken all of the knowledge gained on Kibbutz Tzuba, and am now relaying it to a class of sophomores that I am teaching at my high school. The more educated rhetoric I can develop at Newton South, the closer we get to a unity in the Middle East.

Having emailed with Professor Ed Webb, the head of the Middle Eastern Studies department at Dickinson, I can see that our ideas of analytic education parallel, and that Dickinson's Middle Eastern Studies major, and Hebrew and Arabic minors serve as the proper venue for me to further develop my interest. With the help of Dickinson staff, and Dickinson's thriving study-abroad programs, I can make Rabin's image of a peaceful Israel a reality.
politik 6 / 34  
Dec 22, 2009   #2
The topic is great

I think you should explain what you have learnt at Kibbutz Tzuba instead of just saying that you see the reality of peace...tell why and how you saw the reality

The professor's mention is also good in the last para..shows you know what you want to do..
Hope this helps...
Will you read my common app essay and cornell suppllement?? Just comment on the basic idea and wheher it has life or if it just seems like a boring rant..
OP jacob5642 1 / 7  
Dec 22, 2009   #3
Thanks! I'll take a look at it right now.
Akshat 2 / 15  
Dec 22, 2009   #4
I agree with politik...

You'd have to expand the Kibbutz Tzuba part!

our ideas of analytic education parallel

shouldn't it be 'are parrallel'!?!?
pbhat 5 / 16  
Dec 22, 2009   #5
This is a great essay! I love how you center you topic around the Israeli-Palestinian peace process.

That said I was left a little confused Kibbutz Tzuba and its connection to peace. Like those above, I would suggest expanding on this a little more

Additionally, I thought the connection between your rhetoric at Newton South and the analytical education (along with the Professor) are a bit weak.

Other than that, a great essay with strong writing.

If you have time take a look at my essay-

Good luck


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