Hey there. I just want to submit my common app. I haven't finished my essay. So, can you just take for a while and read my essay? I know that there're sooooo many mistakes, especially about grammar. I need your comments and advices. Please help me! Thanks!
It's just different
I have a simple experience of cross-cultural understanding. When I participated in student exchange programs sponsored by the American Field Service (AFS), they gave me the opportunity to experience a homestay with a family in Japan. When I arrived at their home for the first time, they asked if I wanted to go to the sento (public bath) or Onsen (hot spring) to take a bath together. They explained to me that going to a public baths are very common and it is a culture from generation to generation to appreciate the guests who came to their house.
I was surprised with their offer. Previously, I've never had to go to public bathhouse. I never even thought to go there, because in my opinion, take a bath together and naked is a bit strange. I know it is part of their way to respect me as a guest and positioned me as a member of their family. However, the offer from them contrary to my beliefs. I tried to explain them about the reasons why I do not want to go to the sento and Onsen. Amazingly I was able to overcome these problems without making them upset and offended.
Cultural differences sometime can pose a risk, at least will cause the non-current communication, uncomfortable feelings or misunderstandings. But in my experience when in the midst of their families, although in a relatively short time, I could overcome those differences and be able to build an effective communication with all family members. In fact, they were very impressed with my ability to adapt quickly and familiar to all family members.
From the cross-cultural experience that I had, I believe that I can do this because this is an excess that I have to build a highly effective communication. And all the problems of cultural differences can be resolved well if we respect each respective culture without demeaning each other. Because if we talk about culture, it's not wrong, it's not right, it's just different.
It's just different
I have a simple experience of cross-cultural understanding. When I participated in a student exchange programs(since you're only referring to one later on) sponsored by the American Field Service (AFS), they gave me the opportunity to experience a homestay with a family in Japan. When I arrived at their home for the first time, they asked if I wanted to go to the sento (public bath) or Onsen (hot spring) to take a bath together. They explained to me that going to a public baths are very common and it is a culture from generation to generation to appreciate the guests who came to their house part of a cultural tradition.They explained to me that going to public baths is very common and that the invitation is a part of cultural tradition used to appreciate guests at their houses.
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I hope this is okay, it's just a quick revision. There's a lot you should add though, I feel like this is too short and not enough in depth for the common app essay.
