falling prey to the cliché of a typical student?
Man, this is cool poetry but I don't know if the AO reader will appreciate it. As the last sentence of the first paragraph, it should be a clear thesis statement. Falling prey to a cliche is confusing, and the "cliche of a typical student" is confusing, because when I think of a cliche I think of a phrase that is overused.
It should be a dash or a comma, not a semi-colon:
Although, I am white, middle-class and do not have any physical handicaps or mental challenges -- I am still different.
To simplify what I am trying to get around to is that; I may look like an average
white C
aucasian student but there is something about me that is unusual and can help supply to a diverse campus.
Merely, I am a family person and a jock. ---Cool, i have never seen merely at the start of a sentence before.
Being rinsed by a Roman Catholic family, they have taught me the concept of church and showed the way to be scrupulous.---does rinse refer to baptism or is it a typo? I think maybe you mean raised, ha ha...
Here is a place you can cut the word "that"
sure
that it will have a significant affect on me.