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"A different language is a different vision of life". My vision of life changed in the USA


Could you check if there are any grammar mistakes and tell me if it looks good

gwu - studying abroad essay



Federico Fellini said, "A different language is a different vision of life". My vision of life changed when I moved to the United States.

I have been learning English since was seven. I also started learning German when I was thirteen. I spent a lot of time learning the languages at school, extracurricular language activities, and I was always taking high places in competitions. When I had to leave my homeland, Poland, and move to the United States, I did not have any problems with the language. Due to my knowledge of languages, I expanded my horizons.

I think George Washington University gives students huge opportunity to study abroad where they can gain experience and improve their language skills. I know how important is knowing a language nowadays. Knowing a foreign language plays a huge role in my future job which is a commercial pilot.

As a future college student, I find George Washington University as a perfect place for developing my curiosity. I cannot wait to start a new path in my future. I know that the best way to learn a foreign language is by spending time abroad so I plan to use the study abroad opportunity. Because I able to communicate in three languages I know how much it helps in my life. I believe George Washington University will have a great impact on my life transforming me into a better person.

I noticed a few grammar mistakes:

... gives students a huge ...

I know how important it is ...

As a future college student, I find ... (Take out the as)

Don't start this sentence with 'Because'
Because I am able to ...

These sentence I think could be phrased better as one sentence:
I know how important ... Knowing a foreign ...
Jan 6, 2018   #3
Marta, what exactly is the prompt that you are responding to? I don't really understand what the point of this essay is because you forgot to include the prompt requirement with it. Before I can comment on the content and how you can possibly improve on it, I first need to know what it is that you are being required to establish in this essay. As I have no idea what it is that you are expected to discuss in this essay, it will not be possible for me to review your essay in terms of whether it looks good, applies to the discussion, and how strong it might be in the point of view of the reviewer. If you provide me with the prompt statement first, maybe I can come back and offer you some solid advice regarding the content and look of the paper. Right now, I don't think it is right to point out grammar mistakes and offer corrections because the content of the essay is subject to change based upon the prompt requirements and possible problems with your response in relation to it.


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