"I am Diverse; experience at an international school" - USD short supplement

As a Catholic University committed to building a more inclusive community, we value students with diverse backgrounds and experiences. Briefly explain how your unique background and interests will contribute to our community.

I am diverse. I felt the importance of diversity in this world from attending to an international school. Although we were all different in nationalities, religion and backgrounds, we all prayed together in a Sacred Heart church. My diverse experiences at my school helped me to comprehend more broadly.

Attending to an international school was a rare experience. It was the most surprising moment when I saw my classroom filled up with girls that were from all around the world. Everyone was different in particular ways; nationalities, religion and perspectives. There were numerous circumstances that shocked me during my 10 years at my school. There were girls who already had piercing when they were in 3rd grade and that does not usually happen in Japan. There were girls who spoke five languages and who practiced Ramadan every year. I did not apperceive any of them before. The most valuable thing I absorbed was not academic facts but the essence of diversity. There are still some racism in this world and it will not vanish completely because it is the way how people assume and it is not easy to change it. However, since I learned various things about this world that I did not know before, I started to appreciate god for creating this world diverse; it makes this world so attractive.

My experience at an international school can contribute to USD community. Being an international student might be difficult but I want to show other students new perspectives and cultures that they never knew before. I want people to understand more about Japan. There are countless things that we all do not know yet and I want to accomplish and provide those knowledge at USD. I will bring diversity to USD community.

English is my second language so there might be many grammar mistakes so if you find any, please let me know!
Thank you so much for your support in advance!

It's good that you spend part of your essay talking about how you yourself came from a diverse background but there's a few problems.

You spend all of this doing that and honestly, most of it is just you repeating yourself. You describe this background well but what did you learn from it? Give me some specifics on how it made you stronger.


This part is what you can contribute but I'm afraid that it's way too small at moment and plus, I don't see much of what you can contribute. I understand that you are from Japan and can bring your customs but again, SPECIFICS! Want kind of traditions and knowledge have you attained from your Japanese culture that you can bring to USD?