i decided to go take classes again after almost 7years. i enrolled a bit late,2 weeks in exact,but they manage to squeeze me in. so this is my first homework, and i'm still trying to get used to writing again. we were told to do it last night and its due tomorrow. im glad i got off work early today to do it. so please give me a feedback or suggestions on making it better.
here it is.im still deciding on the title.
An influential person is someone that can change your life. A close friend, family member or just some stranger can make that change. A person you look up to and really like or the opposite. In my case, it's the person I didn't like.
I remember about two and a half years ago, when I was still a recruit fresh from corps school, I used to hate going to work because of this nurse. I don't know why I always end up with him every time they make patient assignments.
How are you doing Mr. Salac?". I heard him say as I looked at the assignment sheet with disappointment on my face. I tried not to show it, so I looked up and answered "Good sir". He was this bald, stubby lieutenant I didn't like to work with. My co-workers used to say he looked like the Mr. Clean guy. He used to come to work still sweaty in gym clothes or in his leather Harley Davidson jacket with his helmet on his left hand. "It's going to be another good day for training." he'd say with a lot of enthusiasm and motivation.
It was a good day for training (learning) which meant for me a long day of work, the reason I hated working with him. He gave me a list. In a small piece of paper there was a bunch of words I have never heard before. They were medical jargons, chemical names and drugs. By the end of the day I should know all of them and give a report to the next shift. So instead of sitting back and relaxing during my free time, I had to be in front of books doing what he told me to do. It was like that every time we worked together, a list or just a random question. Again I had to look up the answer and give him a report by the end of the day. After the report, he asked me which one I had trouble understanding and put it into words I'll easily remember.
Months went by, I came to realize I learned a lot. The list and random questions were my patients' conditions and their medications. The reason they were sick and what we're trying to do to make them better. It was no longer a burden but a challenge. With every "good job" and tap on the back, that hatred soon disappeared. We developed a good working relationship afterwards. He trusted me to do things right based on my own judgment and from what I have learned from him. We eventually parted ways and continue with our careers.
We bumped into each other the other day. Same as before, he greeted me "How are you doing Mr. Salac?". I quickly answered back "good sir!" and shook his hand. I told him that I'm in school right now and he said that he's proud of me for that.
Learning is continuous. There's something new to learn everyday. That is what I've learned from him. He may have forced me to do it at first but in the end it helped me a lot. Sometimes we don't need a push from someone to help us get through obstacles, but instead, we need that little pull as a form of resistance to challenge us even more.
I remember About two and a half years ago, when I was still a recruit fresh
from corps school, I used to hate going to work because of this nurse.
On a small piece of paper there was a bunch of words I have never heard before. They were medical jargon , chemical names and drugs.
After the report, he asked me which one I had trouble understanding and put it into words I would easily remember.
Months went by before I came to realize I had learned a lot.
The reasons they were sick and what we were trying to do to make them better.
It was no longer a burden but a challenge. With every "good job" and tap on the back, that hatred soon disappeared. We developed a good working relationship after that.
We eventually parted ways and continued with our careers.
There's something new to learn every day .
"Sometimes we don't need a push from someone to help us get through obstacles, but instead, we need that little pull as a form of resistance to challenge us even more."
I love this last sentence!
This is well written, good luck in school.
Overall a decent essay. A couple of suggestions:
"The list and random questions were my patients' conditions and their medications. " Then the questions weren't random, then, were they? Perhaps you should describe them some other way.
"Sometimes we don't need a push from someone to help us get through obstacles, but instead, we need that little pull as a form of resistance to challenge us even more."
I love what you are trying to do with the last sentence. I'm not convinced it actually works, mostly because the guy you are talking about could be described as giving you a metaphorical push, so the distinction you are trying to make between push and pull doesn't actually exist in this case, which is weakness in the metaphor.
thanks for your responses. just got out of that class and submitted the paper,so its kinda late to do the changes.i tried to check for your replies while i was at work today tho.
so i have a bunch of mistakes in grammar. that push and pull was kinda blurry too, but i noted my mistakes for my next paper due on monday. its goin to be about an event where i had a gender related conflict with the opposite sex.
Well, if you post your draft for that essay as soon as you have it, perhaps we can give you some more pointers.
ill do that for my next homework now that i have a couple of days to do it. i did that last night too. i posted the draft as soon as i was done with it. there was just not enough time i guess coz it was due the next day. but thank you.
