"doll making"-my common app short answer(extracurriculum activity)

Please give me some feed back and i'm glad to hear your advice. thx~ : )

Doll making is like a miniature life of my own. Having a big picture in mind and not losing patience in every stitching work both are critical for creating the perfect doll. You can't judge a stitch of its position, direction or color if it's not designed to form a feature. The finished doll won't look adorable as you imagined if every tiny configuration is not treated with extreme care. It is not easy always. Just like real life, everyday seems like an exact and boring repeat of the previous day. Hold there, don't lose faith and all those plain vanilla days will produce a magnificent future.

All my dolls are made of household craps. The Ordinary generate the extraordinary through my imagination and bare hands. My days may look mundane to you, but I love each one of them because collectively they create magic.

I like the way you started it. In fact, I like everything about your first paragraph. But "Hold there" sounds a little awkward... shouldn't it be "Hold on"?

Household craps? I hope you mean "household scraps". I think you should move "All my dolls are made of household craps. The Ordinary generate the extraordinary through my imagination and bare hands." above into the first paragraph, then the last sentence can continue on from "...magnificent future."

Just my two cents. Good luck!

Hi, Jayasree! I really appreciate your advice.
Really? You like it? I'm really surprised and happy!
Yeah, well, I didn't notice I had mistype the "scraps" as "craps"...This mistake is quite...embarrassing...^_^" I'm just so carelessly...

And the "hold on", the proposal that I can make some move to the sentences-- all the suggestions you give me are just very useful and really give me more inspiration.

Thank you very much for your help!!!^^

I really like your essay...
Doll making is really an interesting activity, so I was really enjoying when I read it. Besides, you connected it to the real life, which lined out its significance.

Except for those mistakes mentioned by Jayasree, I think the essay is ready to go..
Good luck...