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Dramatic tales, Storyteller-- NYU SUPPLEMENT


bhoppe 2 / 2  
Oct 17, 2012   #1
I could really use some help with my supplement essay, I feel the ending is too abrupt, and it seems almost cheesy and cliche. What do you think?

Q:NYU's global network provides students with hundreds of academic areas of interest for students to cultivate their intellectual curiosity and to help achieve their career goals. Whether you are entirely undecided about your academic plans or you have a definitive program of study in mind, what are your own academic interests? Feel free to share any thoughts on any particular programs or how you might explore those interests at NYU on any of our campuses.

A:Telling long, complicated, dramatic tales has always been a part of our history. Even before writing and publishing became popular, poets and orators, like Homer, would spin tales for their audience shaping words into daring sword fights, tremendous beasts and creatures, or even less physical things like love. As our society advanced, we remained firm in holding on to the sculptors of words. They found their way into the written word, as Shakespeare and many others penned stories of love, woe, mystery, and magic. Yet, as the popularity of plays waned, our love for stories did not. These sculptors began writing things not to be said aloud, but to be read. Books became the new masterpieces, pieces like The Sun Also Rises or 1984. As humans, we craved to see words shaped into stories we could not even dream of. Our society kept advancing the art of telling stories. When radio was invented, tales like War of the Worlds were read aloud on the radio, so convincingly, that many did believe the Martians had truly landed. And today, despite the apparent lack of interest in reading many of my generation seems to hold, we still have a deep admiration for storytelling. Television programmes and Films have become our new outlet for these sculptors of words. I have been spinning words into tales my entire life, and television or film is where I belong, alongside my fellow storytellers.
Jane123 1 / 3  
Oct 17, 2012   #2
i feel like you are telling too little about urself. so maybe the ending seems a little bit abrupt.
yes, telling story has always been part of our society but tell more about how does this history/ culture has any influence on u
the admission officer want to see who you are.
good luck:) it would definately be a great essay!


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