Please provide information which you feel will be of interest to the Admissions Tutors and will help them know you better, e.g. your reasons for applying to HKU, the chosen curricula, extra-curricular activities, participation in voluntary work, past working experience, career aspirations and other achievements.
University life is one of the stages that we will get through in our life, for an adequate period of study, usually three to four years. Hence, it is not weird for us for wanting to admit into a reputable university. What more to say is its quality which can help us better in pursuing our knowledge and that is why Hong Kong University comes into my eyes.
Nowadays, competitions are all around the world, countries compete for resources, staffs compete for promotion, for students, they compete for excellence in the university. I believe that Hong Kong University is one of the most competitive university in the world and it is undeniable that I can benefit a lot from this competitive spirit during my study in the university and it prepares me well when I am entering the working society.
In Malaysia, it is common for us to percept that all schools in Hong Kong are based in Mandarin language, but the seminar in my Tunku Abdul Rahman College has changed my perception. The lecturer has brought me in to an another new horizon, I have learnt that Hong Kong University(HKU) are not only based in English language, but also is one of the reputable university in Asia. Moreover, I could find my preferable course there, in this HKU.
I dream to be a professional programmer, one who has a decent knowledge of all programming language and am able to design a program which can benefit all the humankind, just like Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of the Facebook Social Network. I also understand that for every victory, there are a lot of hard works and patience you have to pay; these qualities are the frontier that separates a successful programmer and a common programmer.
Judging from my capabilities, I am quite assured of myself that I have the patience as well as the commitment to work through this hardship. Serving as the committee in my school Student Welfare Club, I have involved a lot in any event organized by the club. From these activities, I not only learnt the importance of the cooperation but also enhanced my patience in planning as well as executing all the events.
HKU seems to be a perfect place for me full of elites from the world. The three languages that I have mastered will definitely help me to have a harmonious life in the community there. If I am accepted luckily, instead of locking myself in my own world, I will get in touch with the people around me extensively. Being a member of the university, I will definitely participate in all events to enrich my extracurricular life
Hong Kong University is no doubt one of the best universities in the world; however I am quite confident to become one of the best elites with my excellent performance and high learning abilities in both my study and extracurricular activities.
any criticism are welcomed
I applied for HKU, too.I think you are applying for Computer related major, and the personal statement should include your career and involvement in that specific field. Hong kong's system is similar to UK's, which requires your academic insight into the major. Your essay is good except for the fact that you did not mention about your professional skill in com sci. It would be a perfect essay if you add more about your major.
bob503: well being a person who has a little or almost no programming experiences, actually i wander what can i add into that specific skills of computer science. Well i do learn some,but it just like some sort of introduction of programming. thats why i missed the addition to the skill regarding the major.
btw, which course you are applying?
The whole first paragraph should be cut out of the essay. It does not really say anything!
BUT, as I look at the second paragraph I think it is very good!! I think you should cut the first paragraph and let the second paragraph become the first.
In Malaysia, it is common for us to percept assume that all ...
I dream to be a professional programmer, one who has a decent knowledge of all programming language and am able to design a program which can benefit all the humankind, just like Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of the Facebook Social Network. I think you should replace this sentence with a sentence that tells about a creative idea you have for making innovations to improve people's lives. Do not just refer to Zuckerberg, because that is too random.
I also understand that for every victory, there are I have to invest a lot of ha rd work and patience; these qualities are
Being a member of the university, I will definitely participate in all events to enrich my extracurricular life _______, ______, and _________ (list some activities). Hong Kong University is no doubt one of the best universities in the world; however I am quite confident to become one of the best elites with my excellent performance and high learning abilities in both my study and extracurricular activities. (This sentence does not really have meaning. End the essay with some discussion of the ways you can use resources at Hong Kong U. to achieve your SHORT TERM GOALS.
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thx kevin, i will definitely take that advice in my heads,
your regards,
Danny
