Dribble, pass, shoot-simple concepts, yet complex in execution when it comes to my favorite sport, soccer. It is the teamwork, strategy, and pure adrenaline rush that I get when I'm on the field that elevates my passion for it. My biggest achievement was at the semifinals of one of the world's largest youth soccer tournaments, the Dana Cup in Denmark. Our team was down to 10 men and we had just tied the game in the injury time. A penalty shootout was to decide the verdict. After four shots, the score was 4-3. We needed a goal to seal the victory. My coach called me and said, "This is everything you have been trained for." I was nervous, but I told myself, "its now or never." I got myself together, looked at my teammates who had their hopes pinned on me, and took the shot. I scored, and we won. I felt ecstatic.
I just made this draft of the common app essay. Any revisions that you suggest ?
Dribble, pass, shoot-simple concepts, yet complex in execution when it comes to my favorite sport, soccer. It is the teamwork, strategy, and pure adrenaline rush that I get when I'm on the field that elevates my passion for it.
AWESOME! :)With the given word count, I think you have done a great job. It well describes your involvement with soccer, your passion, your focus, and its influence on your character. I dont think you can do any better than this.
In my view, you address everything the prompt expects from you. Good Job!