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'Duke supports their Sport clubs' - Duke Essay


ekreal 6 / 35  
Jan 2, 2012   #1
If you are applying to Trinity College of Arts and Sciences, please discuss why you consider Duke a good match for you. Is there something in particular at Duke that attracts you? Please limit your response to one or two paragraphs.

My essay:

After researching College's in the US for quite some time, I finally came to know of Duke.
The school's great way of making the students engage in their own education by letting them experience beyond the classroom was the first thing that appealed to me.

I followed Nicholas School on the research they were doing in Durban, South Africa and this is the kind of program I would have loved to be a part of.

In general I find the schools study abroad/summer programs very appealing, like for example the OTS programs: Global Health Issues in South Africa and Costa Rica Tropical Biology.

I lived in Costa Rica for 3 months with my family, where we joined different organizations trying to help the animal life and rainforest. I have yet not been to South Africa, but it is a place I have dreamed of exploring years. Coming from Denmark, a country with an amazing healthcare system, it would be extremely interesting to see and study the health system in South Africa.

The campus and life at Duke was the other thing that truly stole my attention. I am very athletic, I enjoy running and biking, and as I am a nature person, living on Duke's amazing campus with beautiful grounds and architecture would be a dream come true.

I think it is great how Duke supports their Sport clubs. I have played soccer for ten years and would find it extremely exciting to contribute to Duke's women soccer team.

I see Duke as the school that truly knows how to challenge their student. I believe I am a great fit for the school. I have an adventurous mind, I am head and hands on and I enjoy being engaged and challenged. I have travelled around the world, seen and know diversity and understand cultural differences. And furthermore I am not like everyone else.
saurabh93 11 / 94  
Jan 2, 2012   #2
You can be less general and more specific. The prompt asks for something particular, and you pretty much have an overview.
--please help with my pomona and commonapp essays if you have time. Thanks
OP ekreal 6 / 35  
Jan 2, 2012   #3
I will take a look at yours if you haven't submitted yet?

I rewrote my entire essay, would you take a look at it again?

If you are applying to Trinity College of Arts and Sciences, please discuss why you consider Duke a good match for you. Is there something in particular at Duke that attracts you? Please limit your response to one or two paragraphs.
aram3 2 / 5  
Jan 2, 2012   #4
i like the idea of your second half of your essay where you say you've seen parts of the world and want to change what you can.

the second and third paragraph of your essay is more personal and relatable. it speaks of your passion for being in the world and making a difference. in the first paragraph you almost made the link saying that duke is involved in the world but for most of that paragraph you spoke of sports. how is duke involved with the world? i think you need to make the link better.

Hope this helps! :)

Good luck!!!!!
DaeDae 1 / 13  
Jan 2, 2012   #5
lol :) i like this version of the essay. Nice work (y)
OP ekreal 6 / 35  
Jan 2, 2012   #6
Thanks, I feel so much more confident about it as well!

Btw the changes you made to your essay made it way better as well :-) Good luck!!


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