'I was dumped with suggestions and views' - significant challenge questions

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation?(*) (200-250 words)

As I enthusiastically started my eleventh standard, I was dumped with suggestions and views. There were people around me, family and relatives who tried to guide me their own way. They consisted mostly of, how my elder brother studied, how I am supposed to study, and so on...I was often notified and spoken of how my brother held books 24x7 and that I should too. I was often made realize how important was to get into IITs... but the question-was that, what I wanted to do? Was that the thing I was made for? The answer was NO!! The major problem of how the society tried to turn me into someone else continued for my major one and half -year, covering my eleventh and most of twelfth standard. During this span of my academic year my continuous effort to follow my elder's advice had made me pay a lot more than I dreamed of. I was broken by my performance compared to my performance in my tenth standard ( national topper ) , I was depressed !! and I was still naive, until my later twelfth standard. I realized this was not me, all my past two year I was being someone else! I pulled up all my strength and energy to gain back all I once had in my High School, I started to motivate me through any opportunity I could get and came up with much fairer result in my twelfth standard as compared to my eleventh standard. It was most significant challenge I ever faced. It was me fighting against me!!

I would like to ask few question to my readers ...
1) Does it interprets me in wrong way to adcoms of MIT
2) Can anyone help me reduce words it is 14 words more...
3) Please do comment on grammatical and spelling errors

Thank you all for your time....

fix your spelling in sentences for example "Was that the thing I was made for?"...to is this the thing i was made for?

also "continued for my major one and half -year"...to( continued majorly of about an year and a half). and so on there are more in there sentences that you can transition in ways like ive just shown you above so check them out

plz read my second essay thankyou!

Thanx mariam almasri

that was really helpful.

Please can anyone answer me the three points I have mentioned. Please I would be obliged if someone could...

Thanking all