She dyed her hair red for Christmas because her parents didn't care, and she was old enough to do so. Her friend got another pair of hundred dollar Ugg boots, to add to add to her collection of five.
There's no clarification in these first two sentences. It can be a bit confusing to the reader. Are you talking about a friend, and then about her friend? Or are you talking about a friend, and then about you giving notice to her Ugg boots?
I'd been in America for 3 years, and sitting next to them wearing 10 dollar Payless flats, I already felt like an outsider.
Residing in America for the past 3 yearsHer Ugg boots, in comparison to my 10 dollar Payless flats,Just fix a little bit of the wording, otherwise, it's fine. Good luck!