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Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in the chosen program and your reasons for applying to UW
After spending countless hours trying to find the perfect program, the University of Waterloo's management engineering program intrigues me the most. I never wanted to specialize in one field as I aspire to become a well-rounded student and understand how different engineering and business aspects correlate with having multiple routes for later alterations in my employment. Other programs across Canada under the industrial engineering spectrum did not fascinate me due to the lack of courses in the curriculum connected to software engineering and finance compared to management engineering. The competitive and driven atmosphere, being surrounded by bright minds every day, and the ability to fast-track my career utilizing Waterloo's world-renowned co-operative education system, made it an easy decision to apply, and it would be an honour to attend this prestigious institution.