Prompt: Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Please help me, be brutally honest if you need to. The more feedback you can give me the better, really trying to get into college and I need all the help I can get. Thank you!
Personal Statement # 1
John Michael, I've had enough! Go to your room, pack up your belongings and get the hell out of my house before I make you leave. As I processed these words, It became clear to me that it was once again time or yet another move. Eight houses, four cities, four different schools, Hundreds of thousands of miles driven, countless relationships gained and lost. One thing in my life that has always been clear, things will never stay the same. After my parents' divorce, I felt an ever increasing need to grow up, a term which I view from a different perspective than most. In the beginning, I hated it. Always arranging visitation, always feeling as if I was letting someone down no matter what decision I made, and always being the mediator between my parents were all things I loathed. However, despite all the negatives, there was indeed a positive, that being the realization of the need to become self-sufficient. This was something that could be attained over time and eventually developed into a pillar of my success. In my case, being self sufficient, meant not only taking care of myself, but also adapting as an individual to the environment of which I was surrounded. When reflecting on my life, I find many distinct correlations to the substance water, a liquid with no definite shape, a substance that adapts to that which contains it.
Water's shapes are never constant; however its properties always remain the same. The only thing that was I was assured would remain constant was myself. Never accustomed to relying on other people, has shaped the way I view the world. Self sufficiency has become more to me than just a idealistic proposition, it has become a way of life. Between paying for my own gas to travel back and forth between my two families to ensure I maintained healthy relationships, to shopping for my own groceries. Being self sufficient is something that unlike other changing characteristics, I can take with me. It is something that levitates my dependency on others, who can't be counted on, and promotes personal accountability for my actions.
Maturation came at an early age, and with that came many new responsibilities. These responsibilities were not things which I could depend on others to take care of, but rather I had to accomplish, and ensure that I was holding myself accountable for the triumphs and downfalls of life. As I venture into the next chapter, I am once again ready to undergo yet another metamorphosis, adapting to that environment which contains me. However, this time, unlike previous times, will be one in which adaptation is not unconscious, but rather methodically achieved with the utilization of the characteristics which I now possess due to the road in which I traveled to arrive at the destination I have today. In the great words of Socrates, "To find yourself, think for yourself". Not depending on other people to dictate to me how or in what way I should adapt, and discovering how I will transform on my own , Is what I believe will help me succeed in higher Level education. People are undependable, if you truly desire to seek truth, you must discover it for yourself. College is simply an arena that will give me that opportunity.
John Michael, I've had enough! Go to your room, pack up your belongings and get the hell out of my house before I make you leave. As I processed these words, It became clear to me that it was once again time or yet another move. Eight houses, four cities, four different schools, Hundreds of thousands of miles driven, countless relationships gained and lost.
I like this part... it well presents the background you grew up.
After my parents' divorce, I felt an ever increasing need to grow up, a term which I view from a different perspective than most.
After my parents' divorce, I felt the need for growing up sooner, which I viewed from a different perspective than many others.that being the realization of the need to become self-sufficient.
....that being the realization of the need to be in charge of myself.