This essay is for the common app. I chose to create my own topic and I titled the essay "My Diverse Education."
Please, feel free to comment on any aspect of the essay. I appreciate any help.
The most significant day of my life thus far was the day I entered eighth grade. Like the rest of the eighth graders along side of me, I was experiencing a new feeling. For the first time in our middle school years we were walking to school as the upper classmen. As I looked around, all the other eighth graders displayed confidence, yet I felt afraid. Everyone in sight was going to march into the Lumberton Middle School for his or her third consecutive year. I however was entering the school for the first time. Not only had I never stepped foot into the school before, but I had also never stepped foot into any school before for the purpose of learning. From kindergarten through seventh grade I, like one and a half million other Americans, was homeschooled. Nevertheless, I was blessed with the rare opportunity to take full advantage of the benefits obtainable through public school as well as homeschool.
Before I was born, my parents determined it was in my best interest to educate me at home, as they had done for my two older brothers. The verdict to school my brothers and I at home originated from my Mother and Father's religious ideals. While my Dad worked, my Mother remained at the house to instruct us. I can recall my Mom teaching me the foundations of learning such as how to count, add, and read. During this time we were able to get to know each other on a deeper, more intimate, level. In addition, I formed an unbreakable bond with my three brothers. Being homeschooled instilled in me a greater appreciation for family.
I believe my most precious principles arose from being fortunate enough to experience home school and public school, not just one or the other. While being homeschooled I received special attention. I exceled when instructed with a one on one style, however, despite my Mom evidently having eyes on the back of her head, she still could not always supervise my three brothers and I all at once. This reality required me to become self-disciplined. Once I began attending public school, my independent nature made the transition from a graduating class of one to a graduating class of two hundred much less concerning.
The dispute on whether or not homeschooling is beneficial or detrimental to the development of a child is endless. There will always be contradicting points regarding homeschooling. I have not taken the stand that homeschooling can be beneficial for children. I will however prove that it has been beneficial for me. I belong to a unique group of people who have faced the hardships and benefits of both types of schooling and I will not let either school system limit me. I will take all that I have learned, both at home and in the public school system, to go forth and demonstrate how effective the combination of homeschool and public school has been on me.
I however, had never stepped foot into any school before for the purpose of learning.
"I was blessed with the rare opportunity to take full advantage of the benefits from both public school and homeschool."
Before I waseven born, my parents had determined that it was in my best interest to home school me, just as they had done with my two older brothers. (You were being too wordy! Just say it straight out :) )
I may be wrong, but "verdict" is a term only use in the court system...I never heard of it being used outside of it...
Mother and Father should only be capitalized when used in place of a name!! "I will do this, Father" "While my father worked..."
I believe my most precious principles arose from being fortunate enough to experience both home school and public school. (Again, don't be so wordy!)
I will however, prove that it has been beneficial for me
Other than that, your essay looks great!! :)
