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"I embraced a new lifestyle" - commonapp essay on diversity


kisna22 2 / 9  
Dec 27, 2010   #1
"What music do you prefer?" asked the taxi cab driver on the way to my first home in America. Nothing was as astonishing as this basic question. Back then, only Indian-Bollywood- music came to my mind, it was the only type I was familiar with throughout my life in India. Little did I know that I was to be introduced to a variety of other types.

It was certainly exciting to move to a new country, but also very difficult. I couldn't absorb the fact that I left my friends, my family, my country, my home. I was torn between sadness of leaving my whole life behind but I felt anxious and excited to start a new life in an unknown world. My life completely changed. I spoke a new language, attended a new school, and made completely new friends, all from entirely different backgrounds than mine. I accomplished this, but it was hard. It already felt disheartening to know that my own heritage was a burden, but that the foreign cultures around me were equally disturbing. I still remember being recognized as the "Indian girl with an accent." For this reason, I was always looked down upon by other students. It was upsetting to be the one who always raised her hand when the teacher asked "who does not have a partner?". I, however, did not lose my confidence. Somebody had once told me, "the best way out is through" as a twelve year old, I found it difficult to not fall apart facing such a cultural challenge. But these few words of advice enabled me to persevere.

The difficultly of this cultural shift was enhanced by family issues. My life was interrupted, once again. With my father facing employment hardships, my family was forced to move constantly, from state to state. I worried about how I would live in such new environments, adjust in new schools, make new friends, and fit in new communities. It was difficult for me to encounter such obstacles again. Not everybody initially wants to be friends with somebody who "has an accent", and who does not always dress the same way, or even celebrates the same holidays as they do.

However, as time passed, I realized that my life was actually adventurous; while experiencing diversity, I embraced a new lifestyle that gave me the opportunity to experience new things, and to readjust my life with a more positive outlook. Through my travels, I met people from various cultures and backgrounds. One friend taught me Bon Odori, a traditional Japanese dance. Another friend taught me some Italian words. If somebody attempted to teach me such things years ago, I might have just rolled my eyes as I was never fond of incorporating new cultures. Meeting people from different countries allowed me to see the different lifestyles that people had and it offered me a new insight on the world outside of India.

A resentful feeling that I once had for my parents changed to a thankful feeling because I was given the chance to experience new things and a chance to teach my friends back in India what I have grasped in the diverse American cultures. After vaulting over many hurdles, trying to readjust in variant cultures and locales, I have gained a lot of experience by facing many challenges that have allowed me to grow as an individual. Much learning awaits me, and I can now embrace the future, knowing that I've got plenty more to know, and plenty more to live.
basketball 7 / 35  
Dec 27, 2010   #2
I worried about how I would live in such new environments. How I would adjust in a new school again? How I would make new friends again? How I would fit in again?

Shorten it: I was worried about how I would live in such new environments, adjust in new schools, make new friends, and fit in new communities.

With each new home, I grow as an individual==> elaborate this sentence.
Though, I always held a grudge at my parents for moving every few months I am now very thankful for being given the chance to experience such a life

Revision: A resentful feeling that I once had for my parents change to thankful feeling because I give me a chance to experience new things.

just some feedback for you to think about, good luck with your essay :D
littlechef 10 / 33  
Dec 28, 2010   #3
It was upsetting to be the one who always raised her hand when the teacher asked "who doesn't have a partner?". I, however, didn't lose confidence.

it was the best advice which resistedkept me from falling apart.

rather than a same old life in India would have been liketry replacing this with something like "the same familiarities of India.

many challenges that hashave allowed me to grow as an individual.

This is a well-written essay. Well done!
livedreamfly3 3 / 30  
Dec 31, 2010   #4
hello again,
first of all. this topic is overused. "transitioning" "moving" etc.
maybe talk about a specific activity that stayed with this transitioning process and how a passion developed for it. :)

***GOOD LUCK! could u edit my Stanford essay??


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