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1. Many students decide to apply to Emory College based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons for making Emory College a possible college choice, why is Emory College a particularly good match for you?
Why Emory college? I find myself asking this question as I was finalising my list of colleges. It hit me that perhaps Emory and I are in many ways similar.
Emory is adventurous just like me. I like to reach out of my comfort zone and explore new things. Emory's CIPA (Centre for international programmes abroad) offer abroad study opportunities in over 100 locations across the globe, it is the epitome of being adventurous.
Emory embraces diversity just like me. At Emory College, there are supports for every category of people - people with disabilities, people with varying sexual preferences, and people of differing cultural background or political perspectives. I am comfortable around people different from me and I always look forward to broadening my horizons by interacting with them.
Emory is sociable and outgoing just like me. At Emory College, there is an atmosphere of friendliness and southern hospitality. Freshmen at the college are warmly welcomed to the college by the FAME programme (freshmen advising and mentoring at Emory), this make sure that I will have a smooth and less awkward transition from high school. The social scene is also vibrant and extensive: with a strong Greek system, events organised by the Student Programming Committee and the much raved Dooley's week. I can foresee myself enjoying the weekends with a group of fun-loving people, and fulfilling my college goal - work hard and play hard.
Like attracts like. Emory and I are so very much alike and the sense of belonging I have with Emory is undeniable. Emory is the perfect match for me.
Emory's CIPA (Centre for international programmes abroad) offers abroad study opportunities in over 100 locations across the globe, it is the epitome of being adventurous
At Emory College, there are organizations for all types of people, such as, people with...
You say just like me a few times in your essay. It sounds a bit repetitive.
The 'just like me' is suppose to be a pattern? I don't know if it worked the way i intended it to though..
Thanks!
Pretty cool! It's the people who try things like that that become the best writers. If you want to do that little repetition to delight the reader's attention, you should end the first paragraph with a sentence that establishes the theme as "just like me." Don't just randomly repeat a certain phrase. Repeat it after establishing it as a theme.
I can't do it for you, but the hint is this: personification
Anyway, I am posting this a week later, so probably you already used it! But yeah, you are personifying it a little as you compare it to yourself. So.. do a big, clever personification in the intro.
:-)
Very nice, but you could, I think, write the last sentence like this " Emory and I are perfect match to each other"
Other lines are fine!!!
