Why Energy Engineering? The aspiration to contribute to the research and development of efficacious green energy, and the crave to secure future in one of the fastest growing field is the answer to the above question. As a dint of fulfilling these objectives, the master's program in Energy Engineering at xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx is a good fit for me.
Mathematics and science and technology have always fascinated me right from my school. This immense interest led me to choose an undergraduate course in engineering, specifically Electronics and Communication Engineering. Since this course requires an extensive knowledge of applied science, computer science and mathematics, so I thought it would be a great opportunity to excel my interests. Furthermore, I believe that my educational background has instilled in me the qualities required to meet the rigor of this demanding profession. Graduation in Engineering has provided a strong foundation in Mathematics and Computer Programming.
During the course of my Engineering education, I dealt with software part of the final year project. Because the project required extensive use of computer graphics, C programming language and MATLAB, it helped a lot in consolidating my programming skills, especially in C and C++-language. Thus, it inculcated in me problem solving and analytical abilities. Meanwhile, I also undertook several other courses like Calculus, Probability and Statistics, Thermodynamics and Heat Transfer , Fluid Mechanics, Organization Management and TES(Technology , Environment and Society), which have wide based application in Energy industry. So, I believe that my educational background has instilled in me the qualities required to meet the rigor of this demanding profession.
This year, 2008, with the price hike in fossil fuel, the industrial and economic activities of slugged down globally, which was then followed by deep economic recession and financial disaster .In a developing country like Nepal, the situation was worst. So, in order to get rid of these situations for Nepal, who primarily depends upon imported fossil fuel to meet her energy demands, the government is initiating to make use of alternative energy sources. In Nepal, there is a huge potential for renewable energy such as hydropower, wind energy and solar energy. The initiation is also motivated by the growing concern over degrading environmental conditions, which is the denouement of extensive use of fossil fuel.
Of the various energy sources, solar energy seems to be promising one for Nepal. Several researches have estimated the suitability of solar energy production in Nepal because of the high degree of solar exposure in most of the regions. Because most of the territories have topographic remoteness, the distribution of hydropower is costly and technically difficult. On the flip side, the solar energy has its advantage over other forms because of its simpler and cheaper production. For this reason, solar energy will be one of the fastest growing industries in Nepal within a few years. Even though some kind of small scales solar energy production units are currently under service, these are not as so much reliable and effective as that is desired. The production of solar energy in large scale requires extensive researches, which in turn requires high level of skill and cutting edge technology.
In the future I see myself, as an Energy Engineer, actively involving in the research and design of solar energy production by incorporating cutting edge methodologies and sophisticated tools in order to cater to the above mentioned requirements. To achieve this I would like to gain exposure to the latest practices adopted in the field of Solar Engineering. To this end, I would want to work with a leading energy researching firm. I would like to bring this acquired expertise back to Nepal and use it to power nation with green energy.
I strongly feel that the highly structured Master's program in Energy engineering at xxxxxxxxxxx will go a long way in preparing me for a successful career in the Energy industry. I am sure that exposure to cutting edge facilities, interaction with renowned faculty at your institution will help develop my knowledge and potential, explore my interests and help me to face global competition. It would be a great privilege to be able to do my graduate studies at xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.
In the future I see myself, as an Energy Engineer, actively involving in the research and design of solar energy production by incorporating cutting edge methodologies and sophisticated tools in order to cater to the above mentioned requirements. To achieve this I would like to gain exposure to the latest practices adopted in the field of Solar Engineering. To this end, I would want to work with a leading energy researching firm. I would like to bring this acquired expertise back to Nepal and use it to power nation with green energy.
I bring along a strong grasp of fundamentals of Energy, a penchant for teamwork and leadership and a zest for challenges. I would like to take with me in addition to the knowledge of the theory and practices in the field of Energy, a network of strong and lasting relationships with my teachers and fellow-students.
I hope my background and qualifications are found suitable for admission to M.S in Energy Engineering program at xxxxxxxUniversity,
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As you didn't include the prompt/assignment for this piece, I have edited the first section and then made some more general comments in regards to the remainder of the piece:
"Why Energy EngineeringThese aren't proper nouns so they shouldn't be capitalized. ? The aspiration to contribute to the research and development of efficacious green energy (Remove comma) and the craving to secure future in one of the fastest growing fields is the answer to the above question. As a dintI'm not sure if this is the right word here; "dint" usually means "by force" or "by force of," so I'm not really sure if it fits or not. of fulfilling these objectives, the master's program in Energy Engineering at xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx is a good fit for me.
Mathematics, science, and technology have always fascinated me right from my school.This is awkward; reword. This immense interest led me to choose an undergraduate course in engineering, specifically Electronics and Communication Engineering. Since these courses require an extensive knowledge of applied science, computer science, and mathematics, I thought it would be a great opportunity to excel my interests. Furthermore, I believe that my educational background has instilled in me the qualities required to meet the rigor of this demanding profession. Majoring in Engineering has provided a strong foundation in Mathematics and ComputerProgramming."
Make sure that if the word isn't the first word of a sentence or a proper noun it isn't capitalized. There are many words improperly capitalized in this piece; on the other hand, there are words that aren't capitalized that should be.
Make sure you are using the proper linking verbs and transitory words, such as "be," "as," "is," and "are." For instance, "I dealt with software as part..."
Avoid beginning your sentences with conjunctive/transitory words such as "so," "but," or "and."
Watch your use of commas. Remember that commas are used when listing items in a series, or to connect two main clauses.
In regards to content, it is difficult for me to say whether or not this piece is appropriate for the prompt, as I don't know what that is. As a standalone piece, it is very well organized, and you explain each point thoroughly. Your introduction is interesting, and your conclusion does tie up the piece.
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