How do you plan to use your engineering degree to benefit society? (250 word limit)
I believe computer science, at any rate the computer world, could benefit the society so widely we might not even have a clue about some of its benefits. Firstly, the computers would present the endless possibilities for all the people, and I plan to increase these possibilities, and also teach people how to use computers more wisely so they could benefit from it further. Moreover, computers drive innovation in the sciences and projects, and also in engineering and other fields. With computers, lots of things unimaginable for humans' minds are possible to be done, and I want to make those unimaginable possible. Lots of works that are using humans' strength and are wasting their time can be done by computers; these would save all the society a time to spend on other activities.
At any rate, generally, the presence, and the development of computers would improve the people's lives' quality and would make lots of works much easier to be done . Humans, since the day they were created, were searching for ways to make their lives easier, and computer is the way to success. My gaining a computer degree would allow me to use my unlimited knowledge, skill, and power to make the humans' wishes come true.
Some people categorize engineers as geeks or nerds. Are you a geek, nerd, or neither? Why? (250 word limit)
As I can conclude from my actions, thoughts, and others' opinions about myself, I can consider myself as a computer geek. I am eager to learn as much as possible about computers, and improve my knowledge in the field. I get so excited and enthusiast about anything related to computers, and sometimes, not so often, I wonder how some people can be so indifferent about computers and programming. Moreover, I can continue coding for a long, long while without even getting tired, hungry, or bored. As I know the meaning of a geek, I can name myself an absolute computer geek, and I am not ashamed of it at all. I believe this characteristic can help me develop in the computer field, and become who I really want: someone who would make a worthwhile change in the world of science.
However, what I have in contrast with obsessed people, is how not the computer is the only part of my world. I participate in so many different activities, some not even a bit related to the computer field, and I have some values not associated with computers, such as my concerns for the society and humans. Moreover, I do not use all my time working with computers though doing a project related to computers is never enough for my eagerness; therefore, I am always in search for more to do in this field.
Let me know if it is good enough for an application, and I would be glad yo hear any opinions about my way of writing.
As I can conclude from my actions, thoughts, and others' opinions about myself, I can consider myself as a computer geek. -----------Ha ha, great humor here. Humor is amplified by brevity. Even though your long way of explaining it is quirky and cool, I still suggest this type of revision: As I can conclude From my actions and also from others' opinions about myself it is safe to conclude that I am a computer geek.
Another reason for that change is that 'my thoughts' and 'my actions' cannot be listed with 'others' opinions' .. because there is an implied "my", like this: from my thoughts, my actions and my others' opinions... so you can't list it that way or you'll have that implied 'my'...
And in the first one:
I believe Computer science, at any rate the computer world, could benefits the society so widely that we might...
Instead of saying 'so widely' it might be more accurate to say 'in such diverse ways' so the reader will understand what you mean. The idea you are expressing is difficult to express.
I like your writing style!
Lots of works that are using deplete humans' strength and waste their time ...
Your paper could benefit from greater usage of vocabulary words. Although your vocabulary is within the average range for most writers, boosting it will help your paper stand out. you may be employing some over-used or distasteful phrases.
Grade: 74* -> C
*based on college grading scale
