I am not a good English speaker so some of my advice may be wrong. :/
I not only feel a sense of belonging
I feel not only a sense of belonging
?I learn more when I work together with othersthan by myself
I get the feeling of "I am here at a second home"
what about I feel at home? It saves your word count
I believe that this style of community would help me flourish both personally and intellectually and allow me to increase and improve my communicational and leadership skills that will benefit me greatly in my future jobs.
Really a long sentence, maybe break it up.
Will appreciate if you check my MIT essay