This is my essay for scholarship. The deadline is Feb 1. It has no word max or min limit but the space allowed is about 300 words.
Plot: I want to talk about my passion for physics and WPI has very strong projects about applying knowledge to solve real life probs that suits me well. Beside, I'm applying to the electrical engineering department.
It was my 6th grade that for the first time, I found myself engrossed in a textbook rather than a comic. As I flipped through the pages, I was amazed by the immense world of physics. It was the first time that something about, not magic or fantasy, but just figures and concepts really captured my mind.
Over years, as my passion grew, physics gradually attached to my daily life. I often find myself questioning something around - from the light bulbs in my room, to the tiny ones in the night sky. Other time, I would be caught departing something to tinker whatever inside. When a question is answer, many others bloom in my head. As my passion is explicit, it wasn't too hard for me to decide what to major in.
To me, applying my knowledge and understanding to reality is the essence of studying physics. However, it's hard to find a perfect school to successfully offer such programs. I did not think I would find the perfect college for me until I read about WPI. My heart skipped a beat when I first saw the Interactive Qualifying Project. It's even more fascinating having the chance to do so while studying. Not only does the IQP will help me tackle with global-scale problems but also a great preparation for their future career. WPI's emphasis on both theory and practice suits perfectly with my preferred hand-on learning. From the Great Problems Seminars to the Major Qualifying Project, I will have many opportunities to experience many societies and perhaps nations; thus, have a various yet clear vision of my future career.
In four years, I see myself attaining lots of knowledge, taking on new and exciting challenges, discovering new opportunities through WPI's engineering programs and having life-changing experiences in a friendly and responsible environment that will enable me to utilize my talents. I hope to a work closely with my dedicated colleagues, using our expertise, initiative, and ideasto improve the quality of life, particularly by transporting food and other sufficient supply to developing countries.
The bold, italic part is from the website and I don't know how to paraphrase it. So, please help if you can. Every opinion is appreciated.
Best regards,
Sounds great and kinda catchy.
The only thing I'd rewrite is To me, applying my knowledge and understanding to reality is the essence of studying physics
What exactly did you mean?
I guess "I want to study physics because I want to apply my knowledge and understanding to reality" , if expanded and more complex, fits better. Anyway, just my humble opinion.
"using our expertise, initiative, and ideas" can be replaced with "using our skills, abilities and gained knowledge and following our common passions"
Good luck!
btw, I love physics too
