Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specify examples to support your argument.
My Essay
Life is a journey with lots of experiences and events. All the experiences may not be good at the time, but later on one could understand the sweetness of success the lessons the bitter experiences give.
First of all, there will not be any one who hasn't experienced the sourness of life events. It is through the trial and error method one knows the lessons of life. For example, a toddler who starts walking manages to walk only after several falls and injuries. It is these injuries that help the child to walk properly. Similarly children who are curious about all things may try to catch the igniting fire of a lamp, and they realize it as a dangerous thing only after their fingers get burned, which give them the lesson not to play with fire.
Similarly those who are masters of driving may have surely experienced the taste of falls and broken limbs. Thus only with a failure one reaches the peak of success. One can easily handle the life situations, if one experiences it earlier, otherwise there will be certain difficulties. Great scientists, philosophers all reached their heights by overcoming the bad experiences. Abraham Lincoln, for instance, belonged to a very poor family and he became the president of America after several hard ships. But he ruled the country and led a humble life as he assimilated the lessons from the life. History provides many more examples like these including, Mahatma Gandhi, and Mother Teresa.
To conclude, life is full of good and bad experiences and even though they seem to be difficult at the time, they are valuable teachers, who teach us the correct and wrong paths of life, which we realize at the end when these experiences help to excel in our life.
remya
An okay essay, you have made your point and backed it up with historical references. But you are missing 1 thing personality. Try to incorporate at least one of your experiences in to the essay to give the admissions officers a sense of you.
Other than that you have a few grammatical mistakes here and than, grammar for me is a weak point so I'll leave those for a moderator or someone more skilled than I.
Nice represntation of facts and overall a coherent passage
But personally i believe the eg. for difficult experiences may include the adversities one face in life and how these adversities may lead some to break records.
Abraham Lincoln narration fits that way. Life of Mahatma Gandhi and Mother Teresa could be told in bit more detail.
i think it was decent. def well written, but it could use some more detail, as Nets said.
Remya
Today i have been quite impressed reading your essay. An perfect essay for IELTS with respect to ideas, sentence structure and length.
Thank you Umme.There is a doubt , not related to essay.isn't this site free.what is those transactions meens?
Some of the experiences may not be good at the time, but later ... very nice introduction!
It is through the trial and error method that one knows the lessons of life.
This sentence sounds funny: It is these injuries that help the child to walk properly.
You can write: These injuries are the errors that educate the child throughout many trials until she can walk properly.
Similarly, those who are masters of climbing may have surely experienced the taste of falls and broken limbs. ----- why did you write a sentence about drivers that fell and broke limbs? I think you meant climbers.
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Thank you Mr.Kevin.
I am very happy that i could manage without gramer mistakes.Thank you for the suggesions
Remya,here is the answer of your question.I was in doubt like u regarding transactions. Now I read FAQ and understood that, thread writing is absolutely free here. But after writing one, u can not delete it, if it is checked by moderator or commented by any user. In case of confidential essay, if you really want to delete it, then you have to pay a credit for this.
