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An experience you encountered that taught you the importance of diversity


MrMaro 4 / 12 2  
Sep 24, 2012   #1
A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your background, please describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.

Any help is greatly appreciated! Also I kind of felt like I was not able to answer the prompt strongly enough, what do you guys think?

Her teary eyes reflected the dim hospital light as her face blushed red. I saw so much life inside those eyes, a longing for life, and a love of life. She was so beautiful. Everything about her was gorgeous, from her tiny Asian physique, to the coral hand-knitted beanie she wore; Janet was an angel to me - a hairless angel. I cried with her, as she pleaded to me, begging for help between each gasp of air. I could almost feel the warmth of her hands, and the spray of the tear drops that flowed from her cheek onto her hospital bed. It was as if I could be the one to reach out to her through my monitor, and pull her here, next to me and say, "Ms. Liang, let me save you, let me be the one, let me make you dreams come true." But the 3 minute and 23 seconds YouTube video came to an abrupt end, and I exited the window.

Janet Liang was one of the countless angels who battled against Leukemia, fighting every day for her next breath as she prayed for her savior. I knew that I had to do something to support her, and even though I was not of age to register myself in the National Marrow Registry, I could not be idle and waste the precious seconds that Janet clinged onto. As I did more research on the topic, I realized that Janet's chance of surviving was slim to none because she was of ethnic minority. I had to do something; I have to destroy the statistic that is killing these angels.

"Cancer does not discriminate, it does not hate, it does not differentiate between age, cultures, or ethnic groups." For the majority of my junior year, this has been my war cry. That spring, I spent a most of my time frantically running from every senior class imaginable, hoping to meet just one person willing to help.

Never before have I noticed how diverse my school, how we had every single ethnic minority enrolled at my school; and never before was I so grateful. That year I managed to register over 50 new people into the Registry with the help of A3M (Asians for Miracle Marrow Matches), 50 new sliver rays of hope.

My work with A3M helped me come to a realization, that Leukemia is not a battle between the victims and the cancer, it's a full out war between humanity against the disease. Cancer is most definitely curable, but only through the combined efforts of everyone. To this day I managed to add over 150 more people into the Registry, but that is far from enough. I plan on organizing countless more drives, at churches, at festivals, at schools; I want to bring the world together on this issue, and save all my angels. We are 14 billion hands linked together; we are 7 billion hearts beating as one; we are 7 billion people strong.
Stanfordhopeful 2 / 6  
Sep 25, 2012   #2
"...let me make you dreams come true..."
Its a good one but i don't think you quite explain why diversity is really important to you. You need to stress it as it is the major part of the prompt. You only state that our diverse world needs to help cancer patients. More emphasis on the importance would make your work glisten.


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