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"My experience and quality of helping others." - UC prompt 2


Eaving 2 / 4  
Nov 24, 2011   #1
Prompt 2: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

An experience that really sticks out to me during my childhood was when I helped my mother set up her printer. My mother was completely befuddled by the instructions. She asked me to help her. I was hesitant at first but I changed my mind soon after. The instructions were not very helpful. I followed the instructions exactly but the printer and computer would not respond the way it was supposed to described on the manual. I did not want to just tell my mother that I was useless in helping her so I decided to experiment on the many options on the printer. After a couple hours, I eventually got the printer connected to the computer. I felt a little pride in my accomplishment but I forgot about it quickly. When I told me mother that I got the printer to work, I was completely shocked at her reaction. My mother beamed at me with her smile and told me how proud she was of me. She said that the next time she doesn't know how to set up something, she would go to me for help. At that point, my heart swelled with pride. I thought she would just give me a word of thanks and let me go on my way. I didn't realize that helping her on a trivial task would make her so happy. It took a while but I now realize that was the pride of being depended upon.

When I look back at my life, I realize there were other times where I liked to help others. For example, math is something I helped others on ever since I was in elementary school. I always thought of mathematics as one of the more important subjects. Ever since I was a child, I was enrolled into extra mathematics classes. With the extra math classes I had, I did moderately well. I usually spend time during or outside of class helping my fellow classmates on how to do their homework or to explain the lesson to them. They would show relief on their face and smile when they got how to do the problems. I felt happy that I was able to help them when they needed my help. During those experiences, I realized that I enjoyed helping others.

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I'm not sure what to write in the conclusion yet. Any thoughts and comments would be appreciated greatly! Thanks for taking the time to read this!

On another note, do I have to put a title when I submit my personal statements?
caoyuxi 2 / 5  
Nov 25, 2011   #2
change "I felt happy that I was able to help them when they needed my help. During those experiences, I realized that I enjoyed helping others." a bit.
snoopylee 1 / 4  
Nov 25, 2011   #3
A lot of your sentences start with "I". Perhaps a few more transition words will help make your essay flow better.

I don't think you have to put a title when you submit your personal statements :D


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