Hello everyone! This is my Texas essay for second question.
Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.
Please give your most brutal and honest suggestions. Thanks to all.
His eyes are torn open. He is pinned down by his neck with a clamp. He wriggles and struggles to escape the torture inflicted on him. He breaks his back in a bid to avoid further torture. Most of the unfortunate, instead of merciful death, are tortured to death. This is a story of not one but thousands of rabbits who are used for testing products that we use in our day to day life.
Science today, is more developed and sophisticated - We have mapped Human Genome, grown tissue in culture, and modeled human physiology using computers. This is the one face of modern science. The other side, unknown to people, is gruesome and simply horrifying.
WHY? Is it because they are mute? Is it because they cannot protest and stand up for what is right? Is it because we are superior? We talk about fighting terrorists who kill innocent people - kill in a ruthless manner. Are we any different from them? But are we not doing the same with animals? We are attack those who do not have the power to fight back.
One cannot justify this testing on any grounds even though; the famous counter argument is that it is essential for science and mankind. But so far there has been no evidence to support this statement. This is done to avoid consumer lawsuits that they may face. The point is animal physiology is very different from that of humans. Many a drug which has worked on animals have been proved harmful to humans. Dogs and other animals are force fed detergents in increasing quantities to see, at which point, does the animal die. I would really like to ask those scientists who conduct these "curiosity" experiments, how does this help the mankind? Even if it helped, are we ready to sacrifice our conscience for it? The whole concept of buying shampoos, lipsticks and other products that involve animal testing is senseless. There are lot of companies that do not support animal testing who are functioning, just fine. We need to support these industries by buying their products instead of others.
I remember, once when I went to this retail store where they stored perfume tested on animals. My friend who also shares the same passion for animal testing went and talked to the manager, however he refused.The next day, we stood outside the shop and started distributing pamphlets asking people to avoid animal tested products and shops that store these products. The shop owner was furious and humiliated us, but we stood our ground. Third day, they removed the bottles. All it takes is a little effort to make a change.
There is a talk of disarmament, and I really hope it comes into action because it will save lives of many animals used for warfare testing. Pigs are typically used for explosion research while others are used to investigate bullet wounds. Experiments on live animals to test hameoraging is one of the most macabre crime on earth. This is amazing! We are killing animals for the improvement of methods to kill humans!? We talk of compassion and brotherhood and this issue shows how hollow these claims.
This is the issue where wake up calls aren't enough. We need to ban these atrocities immediately and work to build a society with more moral and ethical outlook. The shampoo maybe, you wash your hair with has stains of blood. Animals too have rights and it is now high time we give them what the respect they deserve.
Just remember that in your application you state that you also did community service helping animals for example at an animal shelter of some sort. Alot of kids make mistakes by writing on poverty (just as an example) but don't do anything to help the poor which my be a negative in teh admissions eyes.
-just learned this fact today in class thought i'd let you know
OK. Agreed one should mention community service and all that, however in this essay when I am talking about "Animal Testing"; frankly cannot have any community service on that. In the diversity essay, yes I do mention. Yet here, I don't know. Would helping out strays fit in here.
Would be great, if those who are about to review the essay say, whether I should or I shouldn't. Thanks.
This was a great essay! I'd have to say that my favorite paragraph was:
There is a talk of disarmament, and I really hope it comes into action because it will save lives of many animals used for warfare testing. Pigs are typically used for explosive research while others are used to investigate bullet wounds. Experiments on live animals to test hameoraging is one of the most macabre crimes on earth. This is amazing! We are killing animals for the improvement of methods to kill humans!? We talk of compassion and brotherhood and this issue shows how hollow these claims.
I think this paragraph hit the nail right on the head, i just feel you could emphasize the hypocrisy of the entire situations a little more. Perhaps a line like "Could societies hypocrisy be anymore blatant?" before the "we talk of compassion line..."
Oh and i also think there should be an "are" after "these claims."
Sorry i'm new to this site so i'm not quite sure how to do the crossed out words and words in red like Mark did, but aside from a few slightly awkward phrases i think this was a great essay.
I would like to know if any final revisions because I'll be sending it by tomorrow. Thanks
Hey, this is a beautiful essay. I'm sorry I did not get to participate in this discussion sooner. I would only change this:
My friend who also shares the same passion for animal testing went and talked to the manager, however he refused.----but it is not an important change! I would just change "for" to "about" because "passion for cooking" = a "love of cooking." Well, you know what I mean.
But forget that. This is a real accomplishment, very powerfully written. Congratulations about that victory at the store!!
